My sitcom: The Yuppies

[18-Till-I-Die]

I dont know if this is the right forum but i thought that, since there are tons of sucky sitcoms out there, i could pull one out of my ass andprobably do better. This idea is for an animated sitcom, ala The Simpsons.


The Yuppies--

The main backstory/plot revolves around the young, liberal upper-middle class Rabinowitz family--consiting of computer programer Mick, his wife 'Kitty', and their two children 11-yr-old Haylie and 8-yr-old Bryan--move to a new neighborhood and happen to move next door to the ultra-conservitie McMahon family--consisting of white supremacist Carl, his biligerent chain-smoking wife Anita, and their three children 11-yr-old Miles, a little hell-child in an incestuous relationship with his 10-yr-old sister Trinity, and the youngest McMahon child the androgynous 8-yr-old Sasha (who may be a boy or girl, it isnt specified). The two clans cant agree on what color teh sky is, let alone anything else, but they bond and somehow forge a freindship nontheless, spearheaded by Cal and Mick's mutual watering hole, an establishment literally called the Smoking Pile. Meanwhile goody-two-shoes Honor student Haylie finds herself hopelessly attracted to the handsome-but-horribly-antisemitic Miles, and you can see the conflict there, spured on by the fact that Miles is kind of attracted to her too, and Trinity doesnt like that. Naturally, when the two girls are near one another the claws quickly come out. Also Bryan's budding relationship with Sasha is becoming more...complicated, and he doesnt know if he's in love with a girl, a boy, or what and he cant just out and tell Sasha he doesnt know what he'she is, so he makes efforts to try and 'trick' Sasha into revealing his/her gender. Add to this the Redman family--comprised of Daryl and Bonnie Redman and their 10-yr-old son Randy--who are perfect in every way: extremely goodlooking, wealthy, powerful. Politically they're neutral; they hold no political affiliation beyond who they like and who they dont, and try to remain as middle-of-the-road and evenhanded as they can...perhaps that makes them the smartest of them all. They genuinely want to be freinds with the McMahon and Rabinowitz clans, and for all Carl cares they might as well. Unfortunately, Mick hates Daryl who is his boss at OmniGloboTech, and tries (unsuccessfully) to sabotage Daryl's life. And the whitless Daryl is oblivious to this; think of him as the Ned Flanders to Mick's Homer Simpson.

The show would tear into various issues, taking none of it seriously, like South Park, but with a more political edge. No one side--conservitives or liberals--are portraied as better or worse; one could actually argue that liberal Mick is more of an asshole than Carl, as Carl seems somewhat repentant about his racist views after finally having met a non-white, while Mick is actively trying to detsroy the life of another person (Daryl), who honestly wants to be freinds, out of sheer penis envy. But generally it's a satiracal take on the various political happenings in the world seen through the eyes of three very different, sometimes opposing points of view--liberals, neutrals, and conservities. The viewer can find what few messages are implanted in the episodes at their own volition, nothing is 'forced', like on some shoes i've seen resently. There is no right side and no wrong, no good or evil, just people with some major flaws being our idiot proxy in teh political world and doing so humorously. And the title pretains to the fact that technically all three families fall into the category of 'yuppies'.

So, what do you think, would it ever make it on the air? Would it suck? Feel free to comment on whatever, i'm just trying to see how the idea would pan out. Take note: some of the characteristics of the people are exagerated, but remember it's strictly a comedy; none of the characters are played for anything but laughs. So dont get bent out of shape, ok. If anyone wants, i could give some info on the first episode, "There Goes the Neighborhood" the hilarious first meeting of our three families, and their established beleifs.

[Supreme Monkey Lord]

Only if the Rabinowitz family is white and the McMahon family is black, then it would be really funny.

[18-Till-I-Die]

Oh perhaps i didnt add this or emphisize it, but Mick is a real pompus ass. He has a sort of ignorant holier-than-thou mentality, like Hank Hill.

And i dont think the McMahons can be black, as the whole point of Carl's story is his 'redemption' from being a racist white supremacist.

EDIT: something i also forgot to add, is that Daryl Redman is black, but Bonnie Redman is white, and they're also the most evenhanded in terms of their opinions. Compared to the 'all or nothing' mentality of Mick and Carl, i.e you're either with them or against them.

[Spanky The Dolphin]

Blech. The incest thing is instantly fatal, I'll tell you.

Everything else sounds pretty terrible. I don't like my programmes to shove messages down my throat along with heavy-handed analogies and "humourous"ly ugly stereotypes with the finese of a sledgehammer.

Also, more paragraphs and fewer blocks of text would help, just from a reading point of view.

[18-Till-I-Die]

It's not as blatant as it sounds. Mostly the whole cast is played for laughs. An example would be an episode i thought up, "Hypertoilet"

Mick goes into an inventing spree, and after several missfires creates his 'crowning acheivement', the Hypertoilet. It's an old toilet, with a nuclear reactor as the driving for for each flush, so it vaporizes the waste. Or so the theory goes.

He tries to get Carl to try it, but Carl is smart enough to know a glowing green toilet with a nuclear reactor attatched to it is bad news. So Mick tries then to get Daryl to test it, and Daryl agrees, so just to be cruel Mick sets the device so it will kill Daryl by vaporizing him...unfortunately Carl has a fight with a bowl of chili and looses, and uses it by accident. The result is that Carl is burned beyond reconnition, and proceeds to strangle Mick for several seconds afterwards, before collasping from the pain. Mick then make sthe mistake on leaning on the flush handle and vaporizes his entire arm and burns himself quite badly. Daryl is untouched, and the radiation causes him to grow a new internal organ that makes his breath minty fresh

Meanwhile Bryan schemes to discover Sasha's gender with the help of his father's toilet prototype, which creates x-rays. He figures if he can get him/her to use it it'll create an x-ray of him/her nekkid and he can finally fiureout what she looks like...down there. So he tricks him/her into a drinking contest, even though he/she wins any drinking contest he/she enters, and risks dying of alcholhol posioning to get his/her bladder full.

Unfortunately, it doesnt make an x-ray, just a piss covered xerox of his/her ass which may be male or female. Enraged he kicks the toilet, shattering it and spraying him with radioactive sludge. He mutates into an eight-armed monstrocity closely resembling Meatwad from Aqua Teens with tendrils.

Later, at the hospital, the doctors cant fathom the stupidity involved in these series of accidnets: a man with no arm, burned over half his body, anther man almost reduced to cinders, and a mutant child with alchohol posioning. Plus, as one doctor puts it, what idiot would even build a nuclear-powered shitter anyway!? When they ask Kitty, Anita and Sasha if they know the three they laugh and say no, embarised to admit the truth they sneek out.

Then a military officer asks Mick if he wants to sell the Hypertoilet to the US army for twenty bucks, and he agrees wanting to be rid of it. Months later, while watching CNN, Kitty reconizes the Hypertoilet strapped to the bottom of a stealth fighter, now dubbed the OHMYGAWD. The reporter says it's a brilliant strategic weapons deisgn worth billions, and hwoever sold it for $20 must be kicking themselves now. Later we see Mick at the Smoking Pile trying to hang himself for throwing away a billion-dolor weapon design for twenty bucks, while Carl and Daryl are trying to hold him back.

I laughed my ass off writing it, so i hope it's at leats partly funny


EDIT: as i said, the political comentary is in the background and some diologue, not the stoies themselves. This episode carries with it a short scene where they're watching CNN and we see Donald Rumsfield looking like that twat who was always talking about how great the Iraqi army was doing in the early days of the war. It contains the following line:

Rummy: i assure you, we are winning! There are no casualities whatsoever, none! In fact a few people have spontaniously been born because of this war, not died. If anyone says otherwise they're terrorists.

Reporter: but how could you know that.

Rummy: God told me. George was in the--

Reporter: wait, did God tell you or the president?

Rummy *sighs* Jesus Powell! What is the difference people!? i ask you, what!?


Aagin, it's only a joke. Dont take it seriously

[Super-Gagme]

How about the racist supremacist family is the black family? The father could be the type of person who finds racism in everything and holds it against everyone, when in fact, by him fighting so "aggressively" against racism he is more racist than anyone else. What do you think 18-Till?

[18-Till-I-Die]

Oh and it also takes a jab at Religion in one scene i wrote for the first episode:


Mick: can you beleive this shit now! Bombing mosques, where will it stop? Are all religions outlawed but christianity!?

Daryl: i dont know i'm an aetheist myself. I try to avoid worshiping invisible people.

Carl: well i was born into the High Church of Jesus Christ--Christian, where we wear our swastikas proud like Christ did when he smote the Jews durring the Holocaust, and i'll die with my swastika on.

Mick: Jesus was a Jew pissant, I'm rather sure he never wore a swastika nor knew what one was.

Carl: he was Jewish...since when

Daryl: Jesus Christ--Christian? That sounds like a musical!

Mick: It was dumbass!

*cut to a grainy 50s style black and white screen*

Jesus, dressed like James Dean from Rebel Without a Cause, is storming out of his parents house

Mary: where are you going this hour?

Jesus: leave me alone man!

a glowing cloud appears

God: answer your mother, where the hell are you going!?

Jesus: the fuck away from you, Dad!

God: you cant, i'm omnipotent!

Jesus: screw you! I'm a rebel bad boy with nothing to loose! I'm going to meet my girlfreind from teh other side of the tacks and were gonna make out, so suck on it!

God: you walk out that door and you're cut off! The Romans can crucify your ass for all i care!

Jesus sneers and storms out, slamming the door

outside he meets several more kids dressed like 50s gangsters, and they procede to dance Westside Story style while he sings "I'm a rebel! You can tell cause i have angst!"

He finsihes the song by jumping on the hood of a car and grabbing his crotch like Michael Jackson, while the windows shatter.

*cut back to reality*

Daryl and Carl are nodding.

Carl: I loved that movie

Mick: Yeah...but the book was better. And the video game kicked ass!


Aagin, it's just a joke, i hold non of the above stated beleifs and state them only for humorous purposes.

[18-Till-I-Die]

How about the racist supremacist family is the black family? The father could be the type of person who finds racism in everything and holds it against everyone, when in fact, by him fighting so "aggressively" against racism he is more racist than anyone else. What do you think 18-Till?

Nice cheapshot, very well played

Well, it could work. I've seen similar situations. But the show's dynamic and some of the humor would have to change.

[Super-Gagme]

Okay I'm not making a cheapshot this time, but that above scene wasn't funny. Not because of my beliefs or anything, it just wasn't.

[18-Till-I-Die]

Okay I'm not making a cheapshot this time, but that above scene wasn't funny. Not because of my beliefs or anything, it just wasn't.

Well i thought it was funny, i was laughing my ass off writing it.

Whats wrong, too slow? Too offensive? I'm really looking for advice here.

[Super-Gagme]

Okay I'm not making a cheapshot this time, but that above scene wasn't funny. Not because of my beliefs or anything, it just wasn't.

Well i thought it was funny, i was laughing my ass off writing it.

Whats wrong, too slow? Too offensive? I'm really looking for advice here.

Over use of offensive language, with comedy you need to use language like that with a style or else it just sounds trashy. Also, the whole flash to the movie thing, just isn't funny :p Maybe you could re-work the whole "Jesus was a jew" thing, you might be able to develop a better scene from that. The 50s black and white flash? No.

[Col. Crackpot]

sounds like the OC