Battle of the Hymn. (a second look.)

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I somehow missed the Christmas update, so I just now read that plus this ending.

Wow. That's all I can say right now.

Thank you. Reading this was a well-needed break from studying for finals.
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Mayabird wrote:I somehow missed the Christmas update, so I just now read that plus this ending.

Wow. That's all I can say right now.

Thank you. Reading this was a well-needed break from studying for finals.
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Mayabird wrote:I somehow missed the Christmas update, so I just now read that plus this ending.

Wow. That's all I can say right now.

Thank you. Reading this was a well-needed break from studying for finals.
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I don't really have much more to say than that :)
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Very nice. It was a good read. Even if I wasnt mentioned but once. That is more than I have got from any other writer. Aside from myself.
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Damnit, I demand the death scene you promised me when the Special Edition comes out.:D
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consequences wrote:Damnit, I demand the death scene you promised me when the Special Edition comes out.:D
Doh! Ment to put you in there with Wilkens. :oops:

Bah, I lost a couple of my notes, so winged it a bit with some of the wrap up. Sorry.
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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Wow... that was brilliant, really powerful toward the end.
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Since SD High got put in the Completed or Cleaned Up Fanfics despite being a Denizenfic and this actually got completed, I vote that "Battle of the Hymn" be placed in the C&C also.
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Mayabird wrote:Since SD High got put in the Completed or Cleaned Up Fanfics despite being a Denizenfic and this actually got completed, I vote that "Battle of the Hymn" be placed in the C&C also.
I need to shop around and see if anyone wants to go through it for a quick edit. I go through the individual chapters myself a half dozen times before posting for obvious typo's and shit, but I'm sure there are still a bunch in there.
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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Did I live or die, just out of curiosity?
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RogueIce wrote:Did I live or die, just out of curiosity?
I did initially write a list of those who died in the epilouge, but it looked clunky and odd so I deleted it and re wrote it.

You can look at it one of two ways; one, if I didn't actaully say your dead, your not. Or two, for the flow of the story, and the fact that it's first person, I only mention the dead people I actually see, so you could be dead and I didn't witness it or you could still be kicking.

I purposely mentioned that Lonestar made it through all right for ulterior motives and purposely mentioned the dead the way I did for credibility in the story. Someone had to die, it makes it better if major or importent people die.

Nobody would care if a bunch of PFC's got killed, but wipe out the CMS and the president, :wink:
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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8) Cool, kickass from the beginning to the end.
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Is it bad that I didn't notice I was dead until now? Anyway thanks for giving me the glorious last death, kinda brings a tear to my lifeless eyes :D. Awesome story man, just awesome.
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CmdrWilkens wrote:Is it bad that I didn't notice I was dead until now? Anyway thanks for giving me the glorious last death, kinda brings a tear to my lifeless eyes :D. Awesome story man, just awesome.

Your welcome, I forgot about consequences horible death, but I remembered what you wanted. :wink: Sergeant.
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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Great ending. Loved the story all the way through. One question though, will there be any more stories set in this universe?
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*shrug*

Lonestar and I babbled about some idea's once. He actually wrote an origin on himself based on Battle of the Hymn. Obiviously, there are quite a few things implied in the story that could be used as a basis for another, just the fact of being in a new world and all that, not to mention the Citadel, but at this point in time, I don't think I'll write anything in it.


sorry.
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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holy crap! how did i miss this? Great work Knife!
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Col. Crackpot wrote:holy crap! how did i miss this? Great work Knife!
Why thank you. Make sure to join with Mayabird and who ever else for the CC forum. I'm also shopping for some one to go through and do a typo edit for me for what ever I missed.
They say, "the tree of liberty must be watered with the blood of tyrants and patriots." I suppose it never occurred to them that they are the tyrants, not the patriots. Those weapons are not being used to fight some kind of tyranny; they are bringing them to an event where people are getting together to talk. -Mike Wong

But as far as board culture in general, I do think that young male overaggression is a contributing factor to the general atmosphere of hostility. It's not SOS and the Mess throwing hand grenades all over the forum- Red
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Kick-ass ending, man.

Sorry to see it end.
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I think that since this tale has actually ended unlike many of the fics in the Completed Section and is quite excellent if I may say so we should be adding it to the Completed and Cleaned Fics section shortly - unless anyone objects of course.

If anyone is going to go through and fix typos just let me know and I'll either wait for that work to be completed or simply substitute the corrected chapters as they come along.
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Good ending, Knife.
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