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Post by Dartzap »

well this fanfic was made in about five secounds flat so if its bad its bad and i dont care so HA!




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There was darkness upon the galaxy as the eclipse moves forward in its everlasting quest.The lights of the galaxy were washed away in blue lightning ,The galaxy moved towards the darkness as if pulled with some invisable grip of a firm hand .


The bridge of the Eclipse Dawn was a busy place at the best of times also it was very noisey and stuffling cause of the bad air circulation which was standeres to all Imperail ships whether they be command veesals or TIE fighters .However today the bridge was quiet,dead quiet . this was beacause of the crew who were staring intently looking out of the view ports at the ship in front of them. The ship which if it was to described in open terms with no techincal terms would have been a fling plate . The trouble with this description would be with the fact it lacked the blue lightning effect which was playing away with the ship.The captain who was a very strange man was staring at the ship in disbelive "Are you telling that we shot thaat ship with one very weak ion cannon and it worked?" he asked his himself. On eof the crewman who captain Nardis thought to be a storm trooper captain stared at him with a icy glare " Yes captain thats is what i just said, we shot it then it just went dark".
"I wasnt to have that ship salvaged and i want a detachment of your elite troops there do you undersatnd me captain?"
"Yes Sir i will do that now "




Sorry for this peice of very Very bad peice of litreture .im on my hols and im very bored so i decided to do this thing :P :oops:

its abit short so i can see if theres any neede to do any more if you like it ask and ill do more.
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Post by Dartzap »

i guess ill have to abandon it then cause you lot havent even looked at this snippet sheesh what doesit take to get your attantion?

:D :) :o
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Just some advice, try running it through a spell checker before posting. Also, you should include more of a story for people if you want some attention.
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Maybe if you took a little pride in your work people would pay attention but the very fact that you say you typed it out in five minutes tells people that you don't give a shit about it so why should we?

Just something for you to mull over.
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