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I don't post in this forum very pften, simply because I dont' have the time to read it all. But thought it might be worth sticking this up (even though I don't like it) to see what people think.
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"I fight with love, and I laugh with rage, you gotta live light enough to see the humour and long enough to see some change" - Ani DiFranco, Pick Yer Nose
"Life 's not a song, life isn't bliss, life is just this: it's living." - Spike, Once More with Feeling
"Life 's not a song, life isn't bliss, life is just this: it's living." - Spike, Once More with Feeling
So, hold up--you don't like the story, yet you posted a link to it, even though you wrote it a long time ago? Hmmm? Something doesn't quite gel there... You sure you aren't actually proud of this work of yours, darlin'? 
Anyway, I'll give you some feedback when I finish it--I have begun to read it, but it's almost 3am here, I worked 9 hours today on my feet, I just finished baking a cheesecake for a friend's birthday get-together thing tomorrow (yes, I know it's 3am and I just finished baking--I was working the rest of the day!), and I'm exhausted and wouldn't be paying complete attention, so I will come back to it when I'm awake. Ok? Good, because I wouldn't wa--zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz..................
Anyway, I'll give you some feedback when I finish it--I have begun to read it, but it's almost 3am here, I worked 9 hours today on my feet, I just finished baking a cheesecake for a friend's birthday get-together thing tomorrow (yes, I know it's 3am and I just finished baking--I was working the rest of the day!), and I'm exhausted and wouldn't be paying complete attention, so I will come back to it when I'm awake. Ok? Good, because I wouldn't wa--zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz..................
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It has some nice concepts (I like the mix of fantasy creatures and modern technology, reminds me of Warhammer 40K in some ways) and is delightfully quick-paced. I don't have many complaints. save for that the various characters are occassionally confusing to me - but maybe I'm not reading it thoroughly enough.
As for the title - what about "Fulfillment Of A Prophecy"???
BTW - Feel free to continue the story.
As for the title - what about "Fulfillment Of A Prophecy"???
BTW - Feel free to continue the story.
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"No, actually I would HATE to have a cookie, you vapid waste of inedible flesh!"