Fanfiction Feedback (and advice)

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-26 11:42pm

Verilon, I DID comment on it. It's just that you need to start at the begining. If you can't find the begining, I'm sorry, but it won't help us.

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-26 11:46pm

IG-88E wrote:Verilon, I DID comment on it. It's just that you need to start at the begining. If you can't find the begining, I'm sorry, but it won't help us.

Okay, I really am doing my best to find the beginning, but it can be pressing for time to try to type it up...Sorry about that. But other than that, would it be a good idea to continue it (after I find the beginning and catch it up) from where it is?

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-26 11:49pm

I'd have to give you an answer after reading the whole thing.

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-26 11:53pm

IG-88E wrote:I'd have to give you an answer after reading the whole thing.

Okay that makes sense...problem is, beginning and the chapter before this are disconnected, and it may be a while before one catches up to the other...*sigh* I will stop posting in this thread for now...unless I have more questions.

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-27 01:28pm

ADDENDA: It now seems as though there is a line that can be crossed, as far as gratuitous sex and violence goes. We've just had a fanfic moved to the Hall of Shame due to gruesome descriptions of a man cutting out a woman's intestines during sex.

Athough describing a mutilated body after a battle, or injuries recieved during a fight, appears to be acceptable, slicing up a person for sexual gratification is pretty twisted, and it doesn't look like Wong will allow it to remain here.

As I've said before in another thread, heavy-handed gore and violence, while acceptable, tends to detract from the story. Try to keep things reasonable, here.

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2002-10-27 01:42pm

IG-88E wrote:ADDENDA: It now seems as though there is a line that can be crossed, as far as gratuitous sex and violence goes. We've just had a fanfic moved to the Hall of Shame due to gruesome descriptions of a man cutting out a woman's intestines during sex.

Athough describing a mutilated body after a battle, or injuries recieved during a fight, appears to be acceptable, slicing up a person for sexual gratification is pretty twisted, and it doesn't look like Wong will allow it to remain here.

As I've said before in another thread, heavy-handed gore and violence, while acceptable, tends to detract from the story. Try to keep things reasonable, here.

I just wanted to pipe in and support Iggy in this stance. And to add a mailed fist to Iggy's nice suggestions, I have just been made a Mod for the FanFic forum and I will be watching for any fanfic that crosses those lines of good taste. There is a difference between torture that is integral to a story and well wriiten (see the Episode where Picard is tortured by the cardasians as a prime example, there's torture but it shows us the strength of the character in that wonderful line: "There are FOUR lights" ) HOWEVER slicing someone's anus and insetring metallic objects is NOT sexy or even well written. It's just GROSS AND DISGUSTING. I'm looking to see well written pieces that add to the forum not pieces of fiction designed to elicit a grossed out response from the crowd. Writers are artists, let's be that, let's make art.

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-27 01:51pm

Congratulations on your modship, Stravo. I think it's well-earned.

If you're going to have a shitload of heavy-handed gore in your fic, I'd recommend giving a warning so that people who odn't like that kind of thing can cut out. This way, you'll avoid a bunch of "That was sick!" style posts.

Post by **NecronLord** » 2002-10-27 01:54pm

As said fic has just been moved into my domain...

there may be some editing

Stormbringer · Post by **Stormbringer** » 2002-10-27 02:05pm

RayCav's fucked-up fantasy is gone. It's all for the better if you ask me. Good fucking riddance.

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-27 03:31pm

Note: If you are looking for advice, you don't need to start a thread to do it. Starting thread that you know will garner only one or two replies is frivolous, and detracts from the forum. If you need advice, post it here, and someone will answer you.

Captain Cyran · Post by **Captain Cyran** » 2002-10-27 06:01pm

*Looks at his story, notices only one post there* Aw damn....shot down...

Captain Cyran · Post by **Captain Cyran** » 2002-10-27 06:12pm

Oh and by the way, congrats Stravo...It is a well earned mod power.

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-27 09:08pm

Captain_Cyran wrote:*Looks at his story, notices only one post there* Aw damn....shot down...

Ditto that sorta....Nobody looks at my fics...*sigh*

Anyways, Congrats Stravo! (BTW, I finally printed out nine of the chapters to Star-Crossed...120 Pages!!!!)

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2002-10-27 11:57pm

verilon wrote:
Captain_Cyran wrote:*Looks at his story, notices only one post there* Aw damn....shot down...
Ditto that sorta....Nobody looks at my fics...*sigh*

Anyways, Congrats Stravo! (BTW, I finally printed out nine of the chapters to Star-Crossed...120 Pages!!!!)

You know, after Bean cleaned up Star Crossed and gave it it's own thread I realized just HOW MUCH I had written - geez! Thats a work of pure love I tell you.

Post by **Kuja** » 2002-10-28 12:05am

It IS one helluva story...

Evil Sadistic Bastard · Post by **Evil Sadistic Bastard** » 2002-10-28 12:17am

Like he was shooting for a novel or something.

And I still don't believe verilon and I kept the spam going for six pages. Damn. (Note to self, don't get drunk and post. Baaaad shit happens.)

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-28 12:24am

Evil Sadistic Bastard wrote:Like he was shooting for a novel or something.

And I still don't believe verilon and I kept the spam going for six pages. Damn. (Note to self, don't get drunk and post. Baaaad shit happens.)

Neither can I....and ditto that...

Evil Sadistic Bastard · Post by **Evil Sadistic Bastard** » 2002-10-28 12:26am

Uh-oh, it's starting again... SPAM TIME!!!!!!!!

No seriously, what is Starcrossed about? I'd read it, but my Internet time is on a very tight leash because I'm not supposed to use the computer now. Could someone hit me with a summary?

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-28 12:30am

Copy and Paste to word and print out...well....if you have 400 page sof paper to spare, that is...

Pcm979 · Post by **Pcm979** » 2002-10-28 03:54am

Congrats, Stravo. But where's your title?
ALL mods have titles. (Seperate thread, perhaps?)
BTW, now you're a mod, does this mean that you'll have less time to write Star Crossed?

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-28 03:56am

Pcm979 wrote:Congrats, Stravo. But where's your title?
ALL mods have titles. (Seperate thread, perhaps?)
BTW, now you're a mod, does this mean that you'll have less time to write Star Crossed?

Of course not!!! How dare oyu say such a thing!!!

Pcm979 · Post by **Pcm979** » 2002-10-28 04:04am

verilon wrote:
Pcm979 wrote:Congrats, Stravo. But where's your title?
ALL mods have titles. (Seperate thread, perhaps?)
BTW, now you're a mod, does this mean that you'll have less time to write Star Crossed?
Of course not!!! How dare oyu say such a thing!!!

Which bit shouldn't I say?

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-28 04:22am

Pcm979 wrote:
verilon wrote:
Pcm979 wrote:Congrats, Stravo. But where's your title?
ALL mods have titles. (Seperate thread, perhaps?)
BTW, now you're a mod, does this mean that you'll have less time to write Star Crossed?
Of course not!!! How dare oyu say such a thing!!!
Which bit shouldn't I say?

The part about him not having time to write Star-Crossed!

Pcm979 · Post by **Pcm979** » 2002-10-28 04:46am

verilon wrote:
Pcm979 wrote:
verilon wrote: Of course not!!! How dare oyu say such a thing!!!
Which bit shouldn't I say?
The part about him not having time to write Star-Crossed!

[Courageous voice] We all have to face up to these possibilites you know. [/Courageous voice]
.....

*Breaks down*

Post by **haas mark** » 2002-10-28 04:55am

Pcm979 wrote:
verilon wrote:
Pcm979 wrote: Which bit shouldn't I say?
The part about him not having time to write Star-Crossed!
[Courageous voice] We all have to face up to these possibilites you know. [/Courageous voice]
.....

*Breaks down*

tsk tsk *shakes head and walks away*