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F.fic no 6 – Battle at the gates of Terra

Thanks to Stravo for the inspiration


"Every single Jedi, is now an enemy of the Republic… Do what must be done, Lord Vader. Do not hesitate, show no mercy".

With these words still ringing in his ears, the man once known as Anakin Skywalker (Now Darth Vader) strode forth, legion upon legion of Clone troopers at his back and the meters thick, sun-gem studded Cortosis laced blast-doors of the jedi temple in front of him.

The lock was only operatable from inside the temple in a state of emergency (As was currently the case) but this was no obstacle to someone capable of utilizing the force.

Slowly, years of jedi training ("No, indoctrination" he reminded himself) crying out he manipulated the controls through the force (The unsuspecting doorkeeper sensed him but did not interfere, blinded by the shroud of the darkside till the point where he couldn't sense Vader's hostile intent or the Clones behind him).

The boots of over a million clonetroopers echoed in perfect timing behind him as the doors swung open and he marched through , into the outer area of the Temple...


In a place far, far away and outside of time a being cackles.
It jibbers.
It laughs and whines & drools (Causing a solar flare in the process).

It waves an appendage while examining the Scene of betrayal, woe & darkness descending (As well as the scene of the impending Jedi massacre).
It gestures and the 2 scenes begin to mix together, a single pool of ooze and visuals.

It cackles and settles back in a reshaped moon to watch the imminent Kaos.


Vader blinked and looked around.
The temple had... Changed, become far taller, wider and longer – more like a wall than the small city it had been. It's single spire had become a series of spikes, battlements and defensive positions.

The environs surrounding it had also changed.
The Acclamator's and Venator's that had landed for support were still there but the cityscape of Coruscant was departed leaving a verdant garden in their immediate area and a towering Hive city in the distance behind an even larger wall.

In his confusion he reached out in The Force – To his (new) master, to Padme, even to Obi-Wan, and felt – nothing.

Yet there was something, a beacon of power in the living force that made the black hole that was Sidious or Verdant fountain that was Yoda look like a childs water-toy in comparison.


The "Beacon", also known as The Holy God Emperor of mankind also sensed the sudden arrival of millions of beings on his "Front yard" as well as a new psyker, tiny as it was and minute as its presence in the Warp was.
Still weak as it might be, it attracted no Daemons, and the Emperor knew just what a difference even the smallest psyker savant could make, not to mention a newly arrived army the equal of any reserve in the guard (barring his elite).

He spoke to one of the immense beings at his side:
"Sanginius my "Son", go to this newly arrived force and their leader, negotiate with him – Show patience for this is a strange if gullible being, but I sense no warp taint.
I sense no knowledge of how they arrived here, or how they penetrated the void shields, but this may be the edge we seek against my – Your former brother".

Away strode he, Sanginius, Primarch of the Blood Angels chapter, empath extraordinare and warrior 13th to none.
Out from the kilometers deep underground bunker that housed the high command's Ante-chamber and throne he came, and up the spiralling tower that housed it.

His wings spread forth he flew upwards and higher, with his wingspan of 12 meters – wings flecked with feathers the colour of the red of blood or white of bone.

Out of the tower he flew, from the troposphere on downwards – A shooting star, or falling god.

Interesting start, look forward to more.

"Commander, report status" Vader barked.

His aide – Commander Cish Veptar (A non clone appointed by Palpatine) replied: "All 10 million ground troops present and accounted for.
20 Acclamators, 30 Venators and 9 Victory-1 class Star destroyers from the blockade & troop transport duty are reporting in with crews intact.
All 70,000 support vehicles of varying classes are intact as are the 30,000 Super battle droids and 1,000 Droidekas we captured from the Cis and that were present as auxiliaries".

Vader replied: "Excellent, so we still have our assault team and the back-up forces from the civil security commision from the outlying area as well as the naval interdiction task-force.
Have you managed to establish contact via the Hyper-comm or Holonet?"

"No sir, we can't connect to the Holonet, and wer'e only picking up very heavily encrypted transmissions – Probably military.
The few unencrypted transmissions we've intercepted seem to mention a civil war or invasion".

"Some things never change" mused Anakin momentarily.

"Sir! Incoming object, get down its moving on a collision course with us" Cish suddenly shouted, aiming his blaster rifle at a rapidly moving incoming object in the sky.

"Wait, order your men to hold their Fire!' Vader barked ("A few thousand blasts colliding could bake half of us with so many troops in such cramped conditions" he rapidly thought).
"I sense no hostile intent, and wer'e to densely packed to start shooting without co-ordinated limiting, and it seems about to-"

BAMF!

The shockwave as the being collided with the ground sent dozens of troopers flying for dozens of meters around.

A wave of dust rolled forth from the point of impact, then redoubling as the figure rose and strode forwards, wings outstretched behind him (releasing new waves of upturned Earth as they slowly waved once every 97 seconds).

He went through the sea of uniform white armoured troopers towards the lone figure dressed in black and resplendant in cape and form.

He came up to Vader, towering over him as a man would over a babe, as a Rancor would over a Wookie.

Then he spoke, in a voice that bought hope to all who heard it, the smell of Kyinthian roses surrounding him & rolling outwards as he spoke, his voice ringing out like a bell's:

"Greetings from my Master and creator –
The Immortal, holy, blessed & true Emperor of Mankind, Emperor of the Imperium, lord of Terra, Creator of the Adeptus Astartes and the Primarchs, Supreme represntation of the machine-spirit of the Adeptus Mechanicus, Ruler of Humanity & Master of the known Galaxy.

I am Sanguinius, first Chapter-master of my "sons" The Blood Angels, 9th of the Primarchs of the most blessed Emperor.
Now, who are you, friend, ally or Heretic?"

Vader composed himself, never before had he seen a physical being of such raw physical power that it resonated around him through the force itself (The being seemed to be covered by the Force, awash in it as only Yoda or Palaptine were).

"I am Darth Vader, a Lord of the Sith, general of the Armies of the Galactic republic.
Where are we, and Is your master the reason for our arrival?"

Sanginius's features contorted into what appeared to be deprecated bemusement, he let out a barking laugh.

"You are on the Throne world of Terra, in the inner gates of The Imperial Palace, and I myself know naught of how you came here through the triple void shields, psyker barriers and other defenses in place around this globe".
"I cannot speak for my all-knowing master in that regard though, and he has dispatched me with a message for you, Anakin Skywalker."

Next he spoke in Telepathy, directly into the mind of Vader:
"He said that your 'Padme' lies dying in your home, but should you swear fealty to him and help defeat the Traitor accursed with your ships, men, Iron-men & equipment, then he shall send you back to your home and love"

This was far from true, but The Emperor knew the power of a few carefully divulged facts, psychically induced suggestioning, and a measure of free will in his "Allies", and so did his Tube born "Children" (Some mastering the art of manipulation to an even greater degree than their father to his eternal sorrow).

Vader confused but sure of his true goal ('Padme' he whispered to himself) answered:
"I... Yes! We shall form an alliance with you in the Chancellors name.
I order this in my position of authority as general of this army of the – Joint forces of the republic & Imperium".

"Excellent" said Sanguinius, while the order was relayed across the army.
"Now I shall inform you of your new tasks as commander under myself of the Inner Sakhegan gate, and as for your ships – They shall join the Solar defense battle-group, small though they may be".

"And" he added in private, again using his Telepathy "You shall learn of the foe who approaches, the Arch-traitor, The Fallen one – Horus".

End part 1

This is one of the few times I've seen Vader (Anakin) totally outclassed power wise in a fanfic, it is definitely an interesting development. Keep it up.

Two things, first of all I would suggest making your "chapters" longer. Secondly, your pacing is turning me off of the storyline. In your first post Anakin is discovering the 40K galaxy and in the next we see an sizeable Imperial force with a shitload of CIS Battle droids heading to what I believe is 40K-Earth?

I'm getting the feel that you've taken an idea and ran with it, but that you haven't fleshed it out as much as you should have, it really seems like you're fast forwarding.

Darth Fanboy wrote:Two things, first of all I would suggest making your "chapters" longer. Secondly, your pacing is turning me off of the storyline. In your first post Anakin is discovering the 40K galaxy and in the next we see an sizeable Imperial force with a shitload of CIS Battle droids heading to what I believe is 40K-Earth?

No, the first part has Anakin about to begin the assault on the Jedi temple (A la ROTS), then he gets "Transported" onto Terra circa the HH.
Next part has the Emperor/Sanguinius "recruiting" him as cannon fodder on the wall by which he appeared (Which is the one wall before the ultimate wall that guards the entrance to the interior of the palace [Where Sanguinius killed the Bloodthirster by breaking it over his knee in the "original" Heresy]).

The Imperial Jedi killing force simply has some droids with them that were captured during the battle of Coruscant and that were bought along as cannon fodder and jedi killers (In the case of the Droidekas), not shown in the movie true, but an easy conclusion (Droids aren't exclusive to the CIS after all).
In addition, tens of thousands of droids is not "A shitload" for the CIS (Quintillions of droids, remember ).

I'm getting the feel that you've taken an idea and ran with it, but that you haven't fleshed it out as much as you should have, it really seems like you're fast forwarding.

Er, no so far all I've done is set up the premise and set up Anakin as a "general" on Terra along with a task force of SW clonetroopers, ships and equipment.

I believe that Vader only brought a few thousand clone troopers to the temple not a million. Will you explain the connection between Warp and the Force?

Sean Mulligan wrote:I believe that Vader only brought a few thousand clone troopers to the temple not a million.

We saw multiple Acclamators deploying troops, we have no hard given numbers and I have this as the Jedi assault force, and all the troops in the outlying area providing cover and ensuring "No Witnesses" (Keep in mind that Coruscant at this point has

"Clonetroopers on every corner"

So a portion of the "Civil police" forces would be large.
Remember, Palpatine wanted not a single super powered, fast Jedi to escape from a temple the size of a small city, blockading the area in 3-dimensions Would require a lot of men (Barring a minimalistic Coruscant with a bare "Trillion" inhabitants where 1 million Clonetroopers would be more than enough for the planet, as well as a third of the entire Clone army:P ).

In addition I must admit to taking a certain degree of "Artistic freedom" due to the lack of hard numbers, a few thousand troops wouldn't do squat to a conflict of the scale of the assault on Terra (With its casualties on the winning side being in the millions), even deployed as reinforcements ona single area as they are.
Even so they still aren't that much compared to the quality of many of the forces, but those Acclamator's are going to come in handy soon .

Will you explain the connection between Warp and the Force?

They interwine but the dark side is pure warp but is "Seperate" from the parts of the warp affected by sentient beings (I.E Chaos or almost all of the warp which is affected by emotions strongly, at least for the past 47.2 thousand years [The time of the Shamans]).

In short a dark side user won't get gibbed by chaos daemons through the dark side, but he can get affected through the normal warp (that chaos users, daemons, etc' can use anyway).

Rather convulted, and a bit unlogical in parts (Since the Dark side would appear to be "The Warp" in many ways) but I must admit to wanting to sidestep the issue of Anakin growing lightsaber claws and gibbering.
At least, not without outside intervention .

Frankly I must apologize if the elements are slightly inconsistant, and I must thank you for addressing them and pointing them out. (This way I can tackle them more effectively in future, which is the whole reason for me writing [Improvement via critique and practice]).
Thank you dear reviewer(s)