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I went ahead and finished the First Arc of "Our Story" tonight, in a marathon writing event, and now it's here for you to download.

Why did I rush it like this instead of putting it in parts like originally planned? Oh, trust me, the reason is very.... good. Those in the know are hereby asked to keep it to themselves.

http://stgjr.racknine.net/misc/os-spira.doc

Well, here it is. Criticisms are welcome if constructive.

Pretty good, but rather short, I think. The ending was kinda fast; climax and conclusion were shoved together. The characters also seemed to grow into their powers far too quickly; maybe a longer journey would have worked better.

Still, a good story