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Posted: 2003-08-30 01:30pm
by InnerBrat
links are easier to copy-paste
I don't post in this forum very pften, simply because I dont' have the time to read it all. But thought it might be worth sticking this up (even though I don't like it) to see what people think.
Posted: 2003-08-31 02:55am
by Zaia
So, hold up--you don't like the story, yet you posted a link to it, even though you wrote it a long time ago? Hmmm? Something doesn't quite gel there... You sure you aren't actually proud of this work of yours, darlin'?
Anyway, I'll give you some feedback when I finish it--I have begun to read it, but it's almost 3am here, I worked 9 hours today on my feet, I just finished baking a cheesecake for a friend's birthday get-together thing tomorrow (yes, I know it's 3am and I just finished baking--I was working the rest of the day!), and I'm exhausted and wouldn't be paying complete attention, so I will come back to it when I'm awake. Ok? Good, because I wouldn't wa--zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz..................
Posted: 2003-08-31 03:28am
by Peregrin Toker
It has some nice concepts (I like the mix of fantasy creatures and modern technology, reminds me of Warhammer 40K in some ways) and is delightfully quick-paced. I don't have many complaints. save for that the various characters are occassionally confusing to me - but maybe I'm not reading it thoroughly enough.
As for the title - what about "Fulfillment Of A Prophecy"???
BTW - Feel free to continue the story.