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As my story isn't sci-fi related, I won't post it, but click this link to see it on Writing.com. I value the input of my fellow authors, so tell me what you think.

I'll try to provide one this weekend.

Hmm... not bad, I'd have to say. Can't really compare it to my chidlhood, as we never really had any pranksters in our calls, and the obly bullies I ever had were not a pair of idividuals, but most of my entire 3rd grade class instead...

As to the actual writing... hrmm... I'd ahve to say you encompassed the natural rambling of small children very well, along with their worries and games, too. Semantically, it's very good. Synatxtically... it looks fine. Didn't see anything obvious, and nothing that didn't mesh. Looks fine, to me.

Thanks for the review, SQ. May try to rewrite and publish a Coast Guard story next...