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Posted: **2005-05-22 10:48am**

The army marches in formation
Stepping in rank and file
Marching for the glory of our nation
Stepping rank and vile

The commanders look and inspect
The drones look up and salute
Giving their structured respect
Only their conciousnesses pollute

The politicians look down
Upon the regime's new pride
The politicians never frown
War is their new bride

The citizens look
At the glory of the state
Their innocence they took
Sent to a darkened fate

Questions, comments?

Posted: **2005-05-22 10:39pm**

Poetical political commentary, that's nice. Though maybe you could do that freelance/freeverse/whatever you call it and try writing longer lines with lesser rhymes and all, since, to me, it sounds kinda haikuey.

Posted: **2005-05-22 10:42pm**

I've tried free-verse. I find it very awkward.

Posted: **2005-05-22 11:04pm**

*shrugs*

Anyway, it's nice to see politiks being the subject of poetry, and not angsty goth stuff.

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