StarDestroyer.Net BBS

I recently read the challenge, and while the contest is over, I still am going to attempt it.

Here's what I have so far:
FORMAT:Screenplay

Act I:

STAR WARS: EPISODE SIX
RETURN OF THE JEDI

It has been nearly 2 years since the battle of Hoth, and things are looking up for the Rebellion.
Commander Skywalker has returned to the swamp planet of Dagobah to complete his training, while Darth Vader is reassigned
due to his failure to turn Luke to the dark side.

Leia Organa, Wedge Antilles, and Lando Calrissian, have been planning a surprise attack on the Star-Destroyer yards
of Fondor Two, in hopes to stop development of a top-secret technology that would inevitably mean the defeat of the Rebel
Alliance, and the last step in assuring total domination over the galaxy for the Galactic Empire.
But first, they must rescue the heroic Han Solo from the clutches of the vile gangster, Jabba The Hutt.

The tides of an inevitable battle are slowly beginning to rise. If the Rebel Alliance falters, it could mean the total end of
freedom, justice, and democracy in the galaxy......

Any advice would be appreciated and welcome. Thanks.

Emperor Brandon

Edit 1: Mentioned Han's captivity.

Hm....that sounds kinda intriguing. Is this the top-secret technology? jk

Seriously, it sounds pretty cool. I just don't have any great suggestions to offer

Hold on. You can not start with Han Solo. He is frozen in carbonite and a prisoner at the end of the previous film remember. He needs to be rescued first.

StarWarsJunkie89 wrote:Hm....that sounds kinda intriguing. Is this the top-secret technology? jk

Seriously, it sounds pretty cool. I just don't have any great suggestions to offer

What's always bugged me every time I see that picture is that the "bridge" is like 15 km long. I mean shit, that sort of makes sense needing that much administration for a ship that big, but it'd be a bitch to walk across...

Sarevok wrote:Hold on. You can not start with Han Solo. He is frozen in carbonite and a prisoner at the end of the previous film remember. He needs to be rescued first.

Right, right... I totally spaced that one. Thanks for pointing it out.

Some more rewriting to do it would seem.

Hm....that sounds kinda intriguing. Is this the top-secret technology? jk

Maybe. Maybe not. I'm not inclined to say, however; (Spoiler)it will involve a Star Destroyer of MASSIVE proportions.

Edit: I just noticed, on the side of the picture of the sd you linked, it says:
"Watch out BITCHES!!!"

scififanoftheearth wrote:Edit: I just noticed, on the side of the picture of the sd you linked, it says:
"Watch out BITCHES!!!"

Haha, yeah, i stuck it there

looks like a good start....... HMS Phalic compensator, that's funny as hell.... lol

CERC

Thank you. Lol, Phalic Compensator. WTH is a Phalic?!

scififanoftheearth wrote:Thank you. Lol, Phalic Compensator. WTH is a Phalic?!

Honestly.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Phallic

scififanoftheearth wrote:Thank you. Lol, Phalic Compensator. WTH is a Phalic?!

HAHAHA..... male anatomy... hahaha