Trying to draw an Uber-Anime-Maid

AnimeJet · Post by **AnimeJet** » 2004-08-17 09:09pm

Might be too big for in-line, so here http://keese.beamsboy.net/color/images/full/maid.jpg

I can't seem to get my art too look like those anime pics you find everywhere. I can still see my crappy style in that picture, arrgg.. but it's as far as i can get, i don't think i'll try doing that again.. just go with the flow.

Just thought you guys would like to see it or something.. any C&C would be nice too.

Post by **Ghost Rider** » 2004-08-17 09:11pm

Really nice.

The big thing I saw that didn't quite work was the eyes and the head. The eyes seemed a tad off center to the head, but the rest worked out well.

Shinova · Post by **Shinova** » 2004-08-17 09:15pm

Only bad thing I notice is the head and eyes, like ghost said.

Maybe try moving the head slightly left, and work the eyes a bit.

Post by **Zaia** » 2004-08-17 09:15pm

*blinks* That's really, really good.

What do you mean it doesn't look like anime you see everywhere? I would've thought that was professional if I hadn't already known it was yours...

darthdavid · Post by **darthdavid** » 2004-08-17 09:16pm

Yeah. That's standard anime faire.

Andrew J. · Post by **Andrew J.** » 2004-08-17 09:48pm

Even though green is my favorite, you might want to put some more color variety in there.

Utsanomiko · Post by **Utsanomiko** » 2004-08-17 10:04pm

For one thing, the pic is perfectly fine size-wise to inline. I've even seen images much bigger than 100k and wider than 600 pixels posted in non A&P threads without much fuss (though they should post such things out of A&P, but that's another topic).

That said, the problem you and others are noticing stems from an improper alignment of facial features versus shape and orientation of the head, which makes the face lose depth and its direction ambiguous. I'm not an artist, but I can at least suggest you ought to brush up on studying proper feature alignment and head shapes.

Other than the figure's pose possibly being off balance (the torso seems to have an odd lean too far to the left), I'd say the rest of the drawing is excellent. The hair has really great flow, body and detail, the coloration & shading is done very well (the hair and background could be done in another hue for variety though), and the clothes really have good shape to them and convey proper materials.

Anarchist Bunny · Post by **Anarchist Bunny** » 2004-08-17 11:21pm

Her tits aren't nearly big enough for "standard anime fare".

AnimeJet · Post by **AnimeJet** » 2004-08-18 12:29am

The face, oh the face, arr. I wanted to make it seem it was slightly turned to the left, but i don't think i made the outline of that face pronounced enough in that way. Also the eyes are too big and nose/mouth too small, it seems. The torso may look off because the legs would put there after the picture was done... i didn't want people saying "omg no legs!".

Halfway through the picture, i thought "ok, too much green" and i changed the shade of some of it to make it bluer, i should have made a more complicated color scheme, but since i was working with a new style, i didn't want to make it too complicated. I'll have to keep this stuff in mind. Not that i'm ever doing this again

Anarchist Bunny wrote:Her tits aren't nearly big enough for "standard anime fare".

I saw that coming. Far, far away.

Superman · Post by **Superman** » 2004-08-18 12:37am

Jet, remember what I told you about the boobs? Well... Oh, I see someone beat me to that... Shit.

AnimeJet · Post by **AnimeJet** » 2004-08-18 01:03am

Superman wrote:Jet, remember what I told you about the boobs? Well... Oh, I see someone beat me to that... Shit.

Not like those aren't big enough already, should i draw a lingerie one to show?

The Cleric · Post by **The Cleric** » 2004-08-18 01:10am

Yes. God yes.

darthdavid · Post by **darthdavid** » 2004-08-18 01:11am

AnimeJet wrote: should i draw a lingerie one to show?

Yes please.

18-Till-I-Die · Post by **18-Till-I-Die** » 2004-08-18 01:44am

I second the breasts. They need to be a tad larger. Ever seen Amazing Nurse Nanako (sp?), thats what you need.

SyntaxVorlon · Post by **SyntaxVorlon** » 2004-08-18 02:16am

Heh, yeah the head looks like it's looking toward you, while her face is looking to your left. Aside from that, skimpy clothing and boobies.

Shinova · Post by **Shinova** » 2004-08-18 01:44pm

I think you also need slightly thicker lines.

Elheru Aran · Post by **Elheru Aran** » 2004-08-18 03:07pm

She looks just fine to me except for the eyes. Don't listen to Shinova, incidentally-- your lines are just fine. I personally don't really go for the thick lines and all; I prefer being able to do more fine detail.

If I were you I'd keep it as it is except for the eyes-- maybe make 'em a bit smaller. Otherwise, she's good. Keep on keepin' on, babe!

Shinova · Post by **Shinova** » 2004-08-18 03:30pm

Eh, I meant SLIGHTLY thicker lines, not THICK lines.

But experiment and find what you like aj. Can we call you aj?

Companion Cube · Post by **Companion Cube** » 2004-08-18 04:55pm

Elements of the face look a little odd, but it doesn't really detract from the picture, and the rest is excellent. Though you seem to have left out the ridiculously huge breasts.

Demiurge · Post by **Demiurge** » 2004-08-18 08:56pm

Very impressive. You are truly talented. There are only a few problems that I see. All you have to do is fix the eyes and the boobs.

AnimeJet · Post by **AnimeJet** » 2004-08-18 10:03pm

My lines are usually pretty thick, but i saw other people that did this style use very thin lines, so i tried to copy it. Oh well, heh. I thougth her boobs were big enough, i mean, most humans don't have breasts that extend past their torso.

Yea yea, i'm such a sell-out. Proportions are off, but it's just a quickie so don't bother telling me what's wrong.

Shinova wrote:But experiment and find what you like aj. Can we call you aj?

Sure, why not. Everyone calls me AJ or sparky >.>

Captain Cyran · Post by **Captain Cyran** » 2004-08-18 10:18pm

Hmmm, love how you did the hair, the shading, and the clothes. Those are all great. As others have said the eyes are wierd. It looks as if someone punched her in the face hard enough to cause it to collapse some. And don't listen to the b00bie whiners. The breasts are a fine size.

SyntaxVorlon · Post by **SyntaxVorlon** » 2004-08-19 02:48am

Those boobies are good.
Looks like a good mascot for SDnet.

Evil Sadistic Bastard · Post by **Evil Sadistic Bastard** » 2004-08-19 05:21pm

She's got to cup the b00bees, then have some demented little chibi pervert spout the OMFG TEH BOOBEES line in the background.

Post by **Beowulf** » 2004-08-19 07:15pm

The bikini pic looks a lot better...