Ep 1: The Phantom Rewrite

Mark S · Post by **Mark S** » 2004-09-20 12:08pm

Zac Naloen wrote:Dude... that was so much better than the original...

Thanks. I'm really glad people like it. Hopefully I'll be able to start posting 'Ep 2 Attack of the Rewrites' in a little while. The changes here spiral into bigger changes there.

Mr. Sinister · Post by **Mr. Sinister** » 2004-09-20 09:13pm

I have to say that I was really impressed with this. I felt that the changes you made gave the story sort of a ‘classic trilogy’ feel. Hard to describe but it felt truer to the original trilogy than the prequels. One of the best changes was to Jar-Jar. The changes you made to him, a diplomat, made him funnier, in my opinion. Putting a dignified person in repeatedly undignified situations. I like it.

The most important change, I feel, is establishing a relationship between Owen Larrs and Anakin Skywalker. Not only does it deepen the sense of tragedy when Anakin does fall, but you’ve also created an interesting and believable character. He sort of seems Han Solo-ish. All in all, a very enjoyable look at what might have been. I look forward to Ep. II.

President Sharky · Post by **President Sharky** » 2004-09-20 11:39pm

Good stuff, if this was what Episode I was actually like, there would have been very few complaints, IMO.

SpyderGS · Post by **SpyderGS** » 2004-09-21 02:21pm

I have to agree with Mr. Sinister. It definitely took on the atmosphere of the classic trilogy and his assessment of the Owen/Anakin relationship is spot on. Even more so, I think that it would better reveal the bitterness felt towards Obi-Wan in Ep. IV when talking with Luke and the sadness when discussing Luke's father.

Mark S · Post by **Mark S** » 2004-09-21 03:07pm

Thanks again guys. It's really great to see people picking up on and appreciating what I was going for. I always though there should have been way more to Owen in the prequals, considering his palpable bitterness in ANH.

All I ask is that when one of your friends complains about TPM you tell them about this thing you read on the net.

Mayabird · Post by **Mayabird** » 2004-09-21 05:17pm

Mark S wrote:Thanks again guys. It's really great to see people picking up on and appreciating what I was going for. I always though there should have been way more to Owen in the prequals, considering his palpable bitterness in ANH.

All I ask is that when one of your friends complains about TPM you tell them about this thing you read on the net.

I certainly will!

The big problem now is that when I see Owen's charred skeleton in ANH, I'm going to get teary eyed. How could somebody so cool be slaughtered so unmercifully like that?

I'm looking forward to reading your rewritten Episode 2.