Star Crossed Fanfic

Crazedwraith · Post by **Crazedwraith** » 2005-06-12 04:09pm

Sweet. I liked the characterisation of Jellico. Reminded me a bit of the Peter David version's attitude towards Calhoun although yours was not as vement.

Comosicus · Post by **Comosicus** » 2005-06-12 04:57pm

Impressive work .... two chapters so close one to another ... although with a great delay before of that.

I only wonder if the Federation Remnant will have the time to put the new technologies to work before the battle for Andor... but I'm sure our writer will take care of that

Darth Yoshi · Post by **Darth Yoshi** » 2005-06-12 07:57pm

Sweet! A 2-for-1 Starcrossed update! Well, nearly.

applejack · Post by **applejack** » 2005-06-12 10:18pm

Great job as always, Stravo. I do have a question though:

Stravo wrote:"His vision was particularly clouded here. Too many decisions to be made, too many forks in the road and the Force was no longer as clear as it once was. It was as if a great mudslide had clouded the waters of the future. So little could be seen now – he had never even had a glimpse of his son until now."

The bolded part seems awfully suspicious. Is it just because of the recent turn of events, or is it deliberate on the part of Palpatine and Gary?

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2005-06-12 10:30pm

applejack wrote:Great job as always, Stravo. I do have a question though:

Stravo wrote:"His vision was particularly clouded here. Too many decisions to be made, too many forks in the road and the Force was no longer as clear as it once was. It was as if a great mudslide had clouded the waters of the future. So little could be seen now – he had never even had a glimpse of his son until now."
The bolded part seems awfully suspicious. Is it just because of the recent turn of events, or is it deliberate on the part of Palpatine and Gary?

Actually it's been stated as far back as the 50's (Christ I'm referring to chapters like decades) that Nemesis was having trouble seeing into the future and even Palpatine expressed some concern to Gary that his precog wasn't what it used to be. With the universe unravelling the very fabric of time is no longer stable and so precog is failing for everyone.

applejack · Post by **applejack** » 2005-06-12 10:36pm

Ah, okay. I can hardly remember that far back...

Trytostaydead · Post by **Trytostaydead** » 2005-06-13 12:37am

This story just keeps getting better and better. I do wonder what will happen with Thrawn and Kahn. And what happened to the Cosmos ending? I doubt Gary will want Kahn getting in Thrawn's way.

Trogdor · Post by **Trogdor** » 2005-06-13 12:50am

So very close to giant three way battle among the stars :drools:

Darth Garden Gnome wrote:The Federation Remnant
Kirk with all his gang, including Leia, Chewbacca, Rogue Squadron, etc.; the rest of the Federation fleet along with Jellico; the Klingons, Vulcans, and Andorians; not to mention a fully armed and operational... Borg. Did I miss anyone?

I don't think so. The most I can come up with is that Charlie X might get done with being Q's errand boy and pop in.

Raven · Post by **Raven** » 2005-06-13 02:40am

Trogdor wrote:So very close to giant three way battle among the stars :drools:

Darth Garden Gnome wrote:The Federation Remnant
Kirk with all his gang, including Leia, Chewbacca, Rogue Squadron, etc.; the rest of the Federation fleet along with Jellico; the Klingons, Vulcans, and Andorians; not to mention a fully armed and operational... Borg. Did I miss anyone?
I don't think so. The most I can come up with is that Charlie X might get done with being Q's errand boy and pop in.

Assuming he survives Maul.

Crown · Post by **Crown** » 2005-06-13 07:52am

*begins sharpenning knife*

I was lied to.

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2005-06-13 10:01am

Crown wrote:*begins sharpenning knife*

I was lied to.

Next chapter sees the fruit of your labors. You cannot predict which road the creative process takes. An extra chapter here one there...next thing you know you're approaching 100 chapters.

Col. Crackpot · Post by **Col. Crackpot** » 2005-06-13 03:14pm

Stravo wrote:
Crown wrote:*begins sharpenning knife*

I was lied to.
Next chapter sees the fruit of your labors. You cannot predict which road the creative process takes. An extra chapter here one there...next thing you know you're approaching 100 chapters.

I'm convinced that you are hiding a double life as a soap opera writer.

The Evidence:

Your ability to string us along with each chapter without advancing the plot too far.

You cause us to crave the next chapter like a whore craves her crack

The elapsed time in real life FAR exceeds the elapsed time in the story. (Didn't Kelly kill Westley about a week ago storywise? Need I mention the fact that the aformentioned chapter was posted in 2003?

)

*eyes Stravo suspiciously....

Ender · Post by **Ender** » 2005-06-13 05:39pm

You can tell great writing because it makes you emotional. This is great writing. Jellico's points were so good I ended up being pissed at Kirk and want to see him charged with desertion.

Ender · Post by **Ender** » 2005-06-13 05:42pm

Chris OFarrell wrote:
Ender wrote:Bump from bottom of page 2 because I say so.
NOT COOL Ender!

It got us 2 chapters in a week. Apology accepted.

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2005-06-13 05:44pm

Ender wrote:You can tell great writing because it makes you emotional. This is great writing. Jellico's points were so good I ended up being pissed at Kirk and want to see him charged with desertion.

Thanks Ender, that is precisely the reaction I was looking for, Jellico had some pretyty compelling reasons not to hand over command and I didn't want to paint him in a one dimensional light as the gloating hand rubbing villainous power grabber. He has as much a right to do what is best for the fleet as Kirk does at this stage considering there is no real Federation government to act as a moderating influence. For the fleet legitimacy is being handed out by force of charisma and will and unfortunately for Jellico Kirk has them both in spades.

Crossroads Inc. · Post by **Crossroads Inc.** » 2005-06-14 03:06pm

Stravo, you brought back the Excaliber, thank you, thank you very much. I shall be counting the days till we see it properly Dual and deal out death with a Star Destroyer.

Stravo · Post by **Stravo** » 2005-06-14 03:17pm

Crossroads Inc. wrote:Stravo, you brought back the Excaliber, thank you, thank you very much. I shall be counting the days till we see it properly Dual and deal out death with a Star Destroyer.

The Excalibur comes on to her own and shines in the upcoming Battle of Andor. Afterall she is the Sith's first attempt at a Great Weapon.

Col. Crackpot · Post by **Col. Crackpot** » 2005-06-14 03:24pm

Stravo wrote:
Crossroads Inc. wrote:Stravo, you brought back the Excaliber, thank you, thank you very much. I shall be counting the days till we see it properly Dual and deal out death with a Star Destroyer.
The Excalibur comes on to her own and shines in the upcoming Battle of Andor. Afterall she is the Sith's first attempt at a Great Weapon.

holy shit!

you know it does seem like a lot of loose ends are beginning to tie up...

Thanas · Post by **Thanas** » 2005-06-18 05:47pm

A great chapter, though I have to agree with Jellico - Kirk is just too hotheaded and way too spoiling for a fight. Poor Jellico - first he works his ass off, and then this guy pops up and steals his fleet. A sad day for the only competent TNG starfleet captain.

Agent Fisher · Post by **Agent Fisher** » 2005-06-20 11:31am

Wait, wait, wait. When did Maul show up?

Comosicus · Post by **Comosicus** » 2005-06-20 04:32pm

Agent Fisher wrote:Wait, wait, wait. When did Maul show up?

Gary brought him back in order to win Palpy's trust IIRC.

Soontir C'boath · Post by **Soontir C'boath** » 2005-06-20 04:35pm

Comosicus wrote:
Agent Fisher wrote:Wait, wait, wait. When did Maul show up?
Gary brought him back in order to win Palpy's trust IIRC.

I read every single chapter and I don't think I would miss a detail such as that either!

Anyone remember what chapter it is in?

Anarchist Bunny · Post by **Anarchist Bunny** » 2005-06-20 05:38pm

I don't think it ever said it was Maul, and later in commentary Stravo mentioned that he never said it was Maul.

Soontir C'boath · Post by **Soontir C'boath** » 2005-06-20 08:55pm

Well even then, I am still wondering what Faram was referring to:

And lest we forget, Section 31 is ready to blow Andors star and take out the entire system ANY any hostile ships and I'm sure they have a plan to keep the bad guys traped in system until its too late....
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Maul is off trying to kill people for the Emperor, who is still running around with his *dramatic pause* FULLY ARMED AND OPERATIONAL BATTLE STATION slaying most of Treks lesser 'superbeings'.

I asked earlier but it has been ignored. Faram mentioned these two events but I never read about these either.

Post by **NecronLord** » 2005-06-21 05:49am

Of course, S31 may not be aware that Star Destroyers have been known to endure supernovas.