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In the words of a famous British Orphan:
Oliver wrote:Please sir, can I have some more...
Now for a full on appraisial/review:

Character/Plot:
Excellently handled, I like how you kept Obi-Wan's sense of humour in place, that was an excellent touch. You also killed off Jar Jar... which needs no explanation on how excellent it is.

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A few hiccups here and there, but not enough to hamper any storytelling... at all in fact. Such as it is: Brilliant, it manages to convey the story, and do it vividly...

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An excellent piece of work, and I hope you continue it soon.
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Zed Snardbody wrote:It was the best part of my lunch hour, though I did get a bit lost at the end as I have no idea who that chracter is.
Aurra Sing - notorious Jedi Hunter, minor appearance in TPM and many appearances in comics. Imprisoned on Oovo IV by Aayla Secura.

Asajj Ventress - Dark force user trained in Jedi arts who is one of Count Dooku's operatives. Most prominent in the CW cartoon shorts but makes notable appearances in the novels and in the comic series. Im still not sure what supposedly happned to her character prior to RotS.
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Darth Fanboy wrote:
Zed Snardbody wrote:It was the best part of my lunch hour, though I did get a bit lost at the end as I have no idea who that chracter is.
Aurra Sing - notorious Jedi Hunter, minor appearance in TPM and many appearances in comics. Imprisoned on Oovo IV by Aayla Secura.

Asajj Ventress - Dark force user trained in Jedi arts who is one of Count Dooku's operatives. Most prominent in the CW cartoon shorts but makes notable appearances in the novels and in the comic series. Im still not sure what supposedly happned to her character prior to RotS.
Doesn't she get thrown from the cliff by Anakin towards the end of the Clone Wars?
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Singular Quartet wrote:
Darth Fanboy wrote:
Asajj Ventress - Dark force user trained in Jedi arts who is one of Count Dooku's operatives. Most prominent in the CW cartoon shorts but makes notable appearances in the novels and in the comic series. Im still not sure what supposedly happned to her character prior to RotS.
Doesn't she get thrown from the cliff by Anakin towards the end of the Clone Wars?
Ambiguous uncertain death scene if I ever saw one. But yeah, that's th elast I ever saw of her. I've heard reference to her being mentioned in passing in at least one of the Clone Wars novels though.
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consequences wrote:Ambiguous uncertain death scene if I ever saw one. But yeah, that's th elast I ever saw of her. I've heard reference to her being mentioned in passing in at least one of the Clone Wars novels though.
coulda sworn that after her uncertain death there a picture somewhere of her floating in a bacta tank or something afterwards.
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Warning: Spoilers galore!



In the 'Obsession' miniseries, part of Dark Horse's 'Star Wars: Republic', it's revealed that she survived the fall, but was severely injured. Dooku rescued her and turned her into a cyborg. Obi-Wan and Anakin manage to find the CIS base where she was treated, and confront Dooku again. Ventress fights off the Jedi and runs towards Dooku's ship, but Dooku orders his bodyguards to shoot her so he can escape. Ventress apparently dies again, and is put on a hospital ship but she actually entered a trance to fake death. She then orders the pilots to take her "away from Dooku... from the Jedi... from this war."

Oh, and Alpha was severely injured by Grievous in 'Obsession', and there was a chance his spinal cord may have been severed, paralyzing him from the waste down. His last scene shows him on a stretcher, being loaded onto a hospital ship-- the same one Ventress was on? Or were there more than one hospital ship on that planet?
Please do not make Americans fight giant monsters.

Those gun nuts do not understand the meaning of "overkill," and will simply use weapon after weapon of mass destruction (WMD) until the monster is dead, or until they run out of weapons.

They have more WMD than there are monsters for us to fight. (More insanity here.)
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Retcon: The head of the Arc Troopers is always 'Alpha' perhaps? Maybe they grew a new one? Fuckfuckshitfuck, I never get in tune with the EU comics.

Addendum: Well he lived to fight another day! SW Medical technology is the shit eh?
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Darth Fanboy wrote:Addendum: Well he lived to fight another day! SW Medical technology is the shit eh?
This seems to work the best. Make sure Alpha shows some signs of this, however-- a scar as a physical sign, maybe, or him developing tactics to counter a lightsaber's defensive properties in his spare time as a mental sign. Maybe intentionally fire the blaster to miss, in order to distract the lightsaber welder from a thrown/projected (from a modified grenade launcher) thermal detonator?
Please do not make Americans fight giant monsters.

Those gun nuts do not understand the meaning of "overkill," and will simply use weapon after weapon of mass destruction (WMD) until the monster is dead, or until they run out of weapons.

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Sidewinder wrote:
Darth Fanboy wrote:Addendum: Well he lived to fight another day! SW Medical technology is the shit eh?
This seems to work the best. Make sure Alpha shows some signs of this, however-- a scar as a physical sign, maybe, or him developing tactics to counter a lightsaber's defensive properties in his spare time as a mental sign. Maybe intentionally fire the blaster to miss, in order to distract the lightsaber welder from a thrown/projected (from a modified grenade launcher) thermal detonator?
I wasn't even on planning on using the ARCs anymore though to be honest.
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"Your highness, General Cody is nowhere to be found." came the almost nervous voice from the other end of the comlink.

Bail shook his head, almost dumbstruck at OBi Wan's departure. "Have you checked the hangar? He did say he was going to inspect the maintenance on his fighter last I spoke to him."

A short pause followed by an even more jittery reply. "General Cody checked out his fighter and left the hangar some time last night." Another short pause. "Planetary sensor logs show a craft matching his specifications exiting into hyperspace sometime in the early morning hours."

Bail hung his head, Its not that he needed Obi Wan to be present at the Another Chance ceremony, but the strict pacifist bloc in the planetary government would have appreciated it if the head of Planetary defense, a man they had barely even heard of, would have been present to mark the occaision. To them this represented the Defense Force's disgust at not being a fully fledged military in their own right. With the Another Chance taking off with most of Alderaan's weapons the Defense Forces were being reduced into spaceport security and planetary shield operation. Even monitoring of the planetary system was being redesignated to civilian control. While Bail had approved of many of these reforms he did not entirely approve of the timing. The pacficists were counting on the Empire to provide much of their planet's security, but tat the same time growing more vocal against the Empire's policies. It was these kind of situations when all else failed that required the wisdom of a Jedi Master, but wherever Obi Wan was he obviously did not want to be found.


Obi Wan found himself in the middle of a conflict once again, only this time he was playing the role of revolutionary. The current flagship for what compromised the Rebel Fleet was one of the few remaining Providence-class cruisers. Obi Wan was given overall command of the ship and its contingent of soldiers and battle droids. He had not been aboard for even a day before briefing mission commanders about their first mission.

"In two days the Another Chance, along with her three escort ships, will depart the Alderaan System at approximately 1900 hours Galactic Standard. The first jump is largely ceremonial, a short microjump out of the planet's system close enough to the planet for everyone to get a suitable view from the skyhook stations. However the real jump will occur...here, at Dantooine."

Obi Wan, in his guise as General Cody, was addressing several key political and military leaders of the newfound Rebellion. He stood next to a detailed holographic display charting the path at The Alderaanain War Frigate and its escorts were going to take to unexplored space, along with their cache of weapons.

"As most of you know the Republic and Separatists held a major battle there, but since the end of that conflict and the occupation of Muunilist afterwards there has been little reason for the Empire to stage anything out of Dantooine, Alderaan selected Dantooine as the secondary jump point due to its proximity to the outer rim, and beyond it the edge of the galaxy itself where the ships would be doomed to the obscurity of empty space. Rather than destroy this equipment, the ships have all been outfitted with remote recall transmitters on the remote chance that the equipment is ever needed once again. One of the few concessions Bail Organa was able to coax from the hardline pacifists."

From the seating area, a hand came up, a Gotal whose rank insignia indicated he had served in an officer's position with the Separatists. "Alderaan is a loyal Imperial planet, what makes you so sure they haven't supplied the Imperials with the same information and that they won't be doing the same thing?"

"A good question," Obi Wan could feel the Gotal's senses attempting to reveal anything they could about him. Gotals were known for their ability to read emotions and dsicern truth, and a man such as Obi Wan hidden beneath a mask and synthesized voice was difficult enough to begin with. "Alderaan is currently loyal, but they would prefer that the weapons be handed over to no one at all, even the Empire, and a small number of ships like this is not enough for the Imperial Fleet to care about anyway while they keep building Star Destroyers."

The Gotal nodded his head and accepted Obi Wan's explanation, which made an excellent impression on these men. He had chosen for the time being to keep his lightsaber concealed for now and from the looks of things he felt he had made the right choice. Mon Mothma, after failing to gain support from those she had aligned herself with during the Clone War, had recruited a considerable amount of Ex Separatists to fight against the Empire. Obi Wan now understood the frustrations Bail had felt, but accepted them for the time being. These were not the Separatists he had fought against such as Count Dooku, but rather the soldiers that truly believed that they had to fight for their freedom from the Republic. Obi Wan had fought hard to prove to preserve the side he thought represented freedom and triumphed, but was horrified later on when he found out he had been fighting and advancing the cause of the Sith. Silently he thought to himself, "Now the true patriots of the galaxy are aligned. There won't be anymore confusion as to which side I should be battling." Obi Wan continued the briefing, making sure to let the people serving below him have a chance to give their input, and after a few hours they had their plan hammered out.

Upon entering the system the Another Chance was to make a computer controlled hyperspace jump towards the spiral arms, where that final jump would be was up to the navigational computer. In order to further the secrecy of the ships' location the hyperspace jump would be partially programmed by a randomizing factor in the computer, which would then be double checked with star charts to ensure safety. The process would take no less than fifteen minutes, but no longer than thirty. Obi Wan's task force would jump into the system and a shuttlecraft would immediately head over to the Another Chance and begin altering the coordinates in the navigational computer. As that part of the mission proceeded a Lucrehulk-class Droid Control Ship would begin deploying droid fighters and keep a close watch, especially on the hyperspace vectors coming from Muunilist. They didn't expect any trouble, but these days expectations were a liability as much as anything else.

Just as he was leaving the briefing room, a battle droid walked up to Obi Wan, Obi Wan almost instictively went for his lightsaber but managed to restrain himself. "Sir," the droid said, in a mechanical tone not much unlike his own. "New Intelligence from Oovo IV." Obi Wan read over the reports, much more detailed versions of what had managed to make the heavily censored holonet news broadcasts. A dark feeling grew in his stomach as he read the details...



Within his chambers on Coruscant, Darth Sidious examined a short list of names, short yet infamous to those who fought on the side of the Republic. Sev'rance Tann, Sora Bulq, Quinlan Vos, Tol Skorr, and Kadrian Sey just to name a few. Darth Tyranus, though merely the Apprentice in the Order of the Sith, utilized a number of Dark Side adepts to further the chaos in the galaxy. However these apprentices, powerful as they were, were nothing but disposable pawns. Sidious knew that if any of these dark adepts had been allowed to survive they would pose as much of a threat as any Jedi to the power of the New Order.

Dooku had done a terrible job of cleaning up after his mess, and if it wasn't for significant infighting between that group some of them may have been able to escape. Sidious' eyes narrowed as he opened two data files on two particular subjects. Asajj Ventress and Aurra Sing, the only two of the names on the list that were not confirmed dead. If Dooku were still alive Sidious would have killed him for his incompetence in failing to deal with them. But soon it would make no difference, the last of Dooku's pawns and the only remaining being who knew of Darth Sidious' existence within the Separatist heirarchy would soon be dead, and in such a way that would finally turn Lord Vader fully to the Dark Side.

Sidious rose to enact his plans when a ringing sound began playing from his console, indiciating a message on his private channel. It was Vader, fresh from his mission on Tatooine, Sidious used the Force and activated the holoprojector. In the background behind him, a variety of military craft were coming and going, meaning that Anakin was still at the spaceport.

"General Skywalker," security was not absolute on the other end of the terminal. "I am pleased by the reports of your success."

"Master, my success was far greater than we could have hoped for. After destroying Jabba the Hutt I managed to take a prisoner of great value, you will be most pleased."

Sidious maintained a calm demeanor, but within his mind he cackled, the news he had been awaiting was finally about to be delivered. The image shifted towards a shackled Yoda, who was currently facing the ground as a trio of clone troopers trained their blasters on him.

"He surrendered without a fight Master, he is broke as is the Jedi Order." Anakin's voice was full of anger, which pleased Sidious greatly. Dooku would have been filled with a false pride at this capture, while Anakin was able to focus his hate. The hate would make him powerful, and when he finally learned to embrace his anger he would grow even more powerful. Sidious looked at the Jedi Master whom he had defeated in the Senate Chambers and began laughing, the schemes and designs in his mind replaced with thoughts of the incredible pain he would inflict on his nemesis. For years he had been cold and methodical in enacting his vengeance, in the last days of the Republic though the Dark Side had called to him, clamoring for pain and suffering, calling on Sidious to fuel the blackness of his heart and revel in it.

"Do not delay General, have him turned over to my guardsmen and personally escort him to my office. I will deal with him from there."

"Yes my master."

Sidious turned from the projector and let out a maniacal laugh as he summoned his guards to him, deep within the underbelly of Coruscant, where Sifo Dyas and Jedi before him had been made to suffer. So too would Yoda, and once he was secured Sidious would send Skywalker to erase Count Dooku's failure from the galaxy once and for all.



Padme rested, sitting upright with her children nestled in her arms as a droid servant brought in a holoprojector.

"A transmission from General Skywalker my lady." the droid said.

Padme's eyes lit up, though the smile and warmth that she used to wear when seeing Anakin no longer came to her, she still desperately wanted to see him. Ever since the children had been born he had been away from her, being sent around the galaxy in the name of this New Order. She had been promised by her doctors that soon she would be able to take the children and return home, and not a moment too soon.

"Padme..." Anakin was obviously lost for words, as she looked upon his face she could see the weight of the universe piling on his shoulders. The darkness that had covered his face on Mustafar was still there, and the light she felt in his heart was fading. But she could still feel it, there wasn't anyone else that could save him right now, it was her duty to try. As a wife, and as the mother to their children.

"Ani, I miss you."

"I have missed you too, I am due for a meeting with Emperor Palpatine in but a few moments, when that is done I promise I will come to your side."

Padme felt tears well up in her eyes. "You will? Is that a promise?"

Anakin nodded. "It is, and I will stay by your side, and with our children, for a long rest." Anakin took a breath, the darkness within him was pushed back slightly. "I'm tired Padme, i'm sorry..."

"Don't be sorry Anakin, the doctors say i'll be able to go home soon, then we can all go to Naboo."

"I have responsibilities here." Anakin's excuse sounded weak, as if even he didn't believe it.

"You haven't stopped fighting ever since Geonosis, Ani no one can fight forever even if they're fighting for what they believe in."

Anakin looked shaken, his robotic hand opened and closed almost uncotrollably. Finally, his head turned as he tended to do whenever he felt ashamed. "I will see you soon my love." The transmission ended as he turned away. As soon as it did Luke began crying, a soft gentle cry that subsided slightly as PAdme pulled him closer to her. Leia cuddled up against her closer as well. Not long afterwards the twins fell asleep, and Padme began to wonder about the future.



"Dooku was always fond of this ship." Ventress mused out loud as her fingers caressed over the Solar Sailer's exterior. "Even though he had been a Jedi for so many years, he had never been able to escape the pompousness associated with aristocracy. He cherished his possessions, almost as much as he cherished himself. It's no wonder he chose to forsake the Jedi." As Aurra Sing watched Ventress looked up, almost wistfully, at the roof of the large cave she now called home.

They had fled to Bpfassh, not far from where Ventress finally escaped for good at Xagobah. The wrecked fanblade fighter from that incident was not far off although it was largely in pieces. It was in this small out of the way area that Dooku and Ventress had established a small hidden enclave for themselves and Dooku's other disciples as the Clone Wars raged on, by keeping this outpost secret they had a place to fall back to when times were tough, or to hide away prisoners when no other place would do. Bpfassh was also ideal because few Jedi had dared to travel there after a group of Jedi fell to the dark side and used it as a staging ground, which led to a large distrust of the Jedi byt he planet's natives.

"Dooku was a narcissist, I gathered as much, so what does this have to do with me?" Aurra Sing gritted her teeth and kept her hand close to the lightsaber Ventress had given her on Oovo. She had never liked taking orders when money wasn't at stake and she had never liked being out of control of the situation, currently Aurra was neither in control or in position to profit.

"It has everything and nothing to do with you Aurra Sing. Have you heard of what has become of the Jedi order from your prison cell?"

Aurra's voice became louder as she grew impatient. "I was stuck in that hole! How was I supposed to hear anything!"

If the aggressive posture Aurra was taking bothered Ventress, Asajj didn't let on. "Then you might be pleased to know that the Jedi have been all but wiped out."

Shock exploded across Aurra's face. She had never thought it possible, she could grasp the deaths of many Jedi, and select master son the council, but the entire JEdi Order being wiped out was nothing short of an impossibility to her. She was only able to stammer out one word. "How?"

"Apparently our Jedi friends turned on the beloved Chancellor Palpatine shortly after he declared himself Emperor. The Jedi were wiped out by the clone army, and one of their own. The famed General Skywalker. Now that Aurra Sing, is where you come into play. "

Aurra was losing control of the situation again just as she had begun to assert herself. In all of her experiences with the Jedi she had never faced Skywalker before, how was it then that Ventress was connecting her to him then?"

"Shortly after my last battle with Skywalker and Kenobi, " As Ventress spoke the name of Anakin's mentor she became filled with anger, so much that Aurra could feel it through the Force. "I came here, I was done fighting. Count Dooku had betrayed me on Boz Pity and I wanted nothing more to do with him. I took his Solar Sailer and came here, when I heard over the holonet that he had been killed I managed to assume several small hidden fortunes of his and I was on the verge of living in deep obscurity for the rest of my days. Until recently, when my true master contacted me."

"Your true master?" Aurra asked.

"Dooku was a brilliant strategist and powerful warrior, but even he lacked the power and desire to conquer the galaxy. My true master, the true Dark Lord of the Sith, is the one responsible for the Separatists, for the Empire, for the entire Clone Wars. Only a few days ago did he contact me. He told me that if I could kill Skywalker then the Jedi would be extinct and that I would be able to take my rightful place as a Sith."

Aurra tensed at the mention of the Sith. Even though she had embraced the Dark Side, she had made it point to avoid the Sith if she and they ever crossed paths. The Sith were all about power and control, and Aurra did not like the idea of being dominated.

Ventress continued. "I was ashamed to tell Lord Sidious that I was unable to defeat Skywalker, that his powers were beyond mine. But it did not take him long to provide me with your location and your imprisonment status. HE told me that Skywalker must be eliminated and that you would be of great assistance in this matter."

Ventress walked towards Aurra Sing and ignited her lightsaber blade, Aurra activated hers and matched Ventress strike. as the two locked blades and exchanged vicious glances at each other Ventress smiled.

"He was right, you do have a hunter's instinct." Ventress disengaged her blade and propelled herself backwards with the Force, smiling. "With your help, and with the Dark Side of the Force. You and I will kill Anakin Skywalker and the Jedi will be extinct for all time!"

Aurra had never taken on a job for free, but she was drawn into this now. NOt only did she owe Ventress, but the opportunity she was being presented with was too great to pass up. She had sensed no deception from Ventress in the Force, and her hatred of the Jedi was as strong as it had ever been after Aayla Secura's lucky victory.

Ventress clipped the hilt of her blade to her belt. "Will you help me?"

Aurra did the same, and after a brief pause she met Ventress gaze with ice- cold eyes. "I will."

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To quote Ackbar: "It's a trap!"

It's definately Palpitine's way of wrapping up loose ends, though. Let Vader deal with it.
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Methinks it's time for a Vader smackdown on Ventress and Sing :twisted: , can't wait.

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Mr CorSec wrote:Methinks it's time for a Vader smackdown on Ventress and Sing :twisted: , can't wait.

Dark Side Adepts Vs A Sith Lord, it's gonna be fun
And not an ordinary Sith Lord, but the Chosen One in it's full power.

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I'm glad to see signs of research-- I've read too many fanfics where the writer made up things and, when his/her details and/or events are in conflict with canon details and/or events, made up new things that ended up digging a deeper grave for the readers' respect for the writer.

I do like the scene with Padme, but does she really understand why Anakin went nuts on Mustafar? Has she made an effort to defend her reputation against the suspicion that she had an affair with Obi-Wan? (I fact, I've read lemons about such an affair-- sick.) She may have forgiven Anakin, but has she forgotten what he's done?
Please do not make Americans fight giant monsters.

Those gun nuts do not understand the meaning of "overkill," and will simply use weapon after weapon of mass destruction (WMD) until the monster is dead, or until they run out of weapons.

They have more WMD than there are monsters for us to fight. (More insanity here.)
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Obi Wan entered through the doors and received an enthusiastic salute from his crew. Dealing with the escaped Dark Jedi would have to wait indefinitely, Obi Wan was tempted to take his ship and hunt down Ventress and Sing, but there were far more urgent matters he needed to attend to. He only had a few scant hours to go over his command ship and review the strength of his task force. It was a motley assortment than what he was used to. His own flagship would be the Providence-class ship known as the Battlehymn. The ship was one of the last to make it out of the Separatist Shipyards and it pleased Obi Wan that he was commanding a vessel that wasn't tainted with the blood of his former comrades. Accompanying him was the Droid Control Ship Master Control, The Corellian Corvette Slashcat, and a pair of Carrack class cruisers with gaudy paint jobs that looked as if they were second hand pirate vessels. The only thing about this force that had Obi Wan worried was the lack of heavy guns. But the nature of this mission was such that if they did come into combat the last thing they would want to be doing is sticking around for a fight, and if everything did go according to plan then they would be leaving with nine instead of five ships.

One of the men, dressed like infantry and carrying a very large sidearm at his hip, charged up to Obi Wan. At first it appeared as if the man was looking for a fight, but through the Force Obi Wan could tell this man's actions weren't hostile.

"Hey!" The man yelled, obviously showing a great disregard for rank. "C'mere let's talk." He put his arm around Obi Wan's shoulder in a manner that directed the two back out of the bridge and into the corridor.

"Is there something I can do for you..." Obi Wan asked, looking for any sort of insignia to identify the man.

"Typical higher ups, you don't even know who's serving under you! If you didn't have that lightsaber clipped to your belt I'd be seriously thinking about cracking your metal skull! I'm the captain of this here rig, Captain Slayke at your service."

The name rang a bell in Obi Wan's head, a briefing from several months ago shortly after returning from a solo assignment he'd been given by the council. While he had been gone Anakin had attained his Knighthood by assisting Jedi Master Nejaa Halcyon in defeating the Droid Armies on Praesitlyn. One of the items in that briefing involved a Captain Slayke who was the leader of a Pro-Republic militia that had bravely fought against the Separatists.

"Slayke? Zozridor Slayke?" Obi Wan asked.

"My reputation precedes me yet again!" Slayke boasted as he performed a heroic pose made more in jest than arrogance. Listen, I know you Jedi can be stiffs but I just wanted to let you know that'll fight for you as hard as I can, and the crew aboard this ship is going to do the same, not like what those bastard clones did to Nejaa."

During the Battle of Praesitlyn Zozridor Slayke's forces were decimated, over 80 percent of his fighting force had been destroyed, and what little was left afterwards was incapable of any significant fighting anywhere in the War. Obi Wan remembered how Master Halcyon had been granted command over a clone army that was involved in heavy fighting on the Aqualish home world of Ando, where the Aqualish had been constructing several droid foundries that if functional would have flooded the Core Worlds with droid armies. Knowing he would need every soldier he could get, Halcyon incorporated Slayke's forces into his own and the Clone Army was able to crush all resistance.

"I don't what it was that happened, but it was late at night back at the encampment. Nejaa was holding court in the prefab mess hall telling stories of how he and his friend Rostek used to bust pirates in the Corellian sector. I wasn't there myself," Slayke gritted his teeth and looked down as if trying to force the painful memory out of his mind. "I was over at the hangar where we had been landing the shuttles. But one of my men came running over to me that night. Apparently an entire legion of clones burst into the mess hall, blasters firing. They didn't stop until Nejaa and all of my men were little more than shredded sacks of meat. Then the rest of my men were attacked, and about twenty of us managed to escape on the Plooroid Balkin."

Obi Wan put his hand on Slayke's shoulder. He vividly remembered the attempt on his life at Utapau, and the battles in the Jedi Temple at Coruscant. Slayke went on further to explain how he had later found out of the Imperial cover up. Halcyon's death was blamed on an Anzati Assassin while his forces had been accused of treason. Slayke himself was now a fugitive, and Imperial Moffs had placed a bounty of over ten thousand credits on his head. Obi Wan could sympathize, both of these men had pledged their lives to cause that deceived and betrayed them, nearly taking their lives in the process.

"Captain Slayke, there's nothing you could have done. I assure you that I would want nobody else at the helm of this ship right now. Master Halcyon was proud to serve with you."

Slayke seemed overwhelmed for a moment, and then his expression changed immediately as he regained his composure. "Hah! Never though I'd have to have a Jedi stiff cheer me up! You're all right, just remember that we're all counting on you for this mission though."

Obi Wan nodded, then considered a question. "Captain Slayke..."

"You have orders for me already? If I had know that I would have..."

"No, no, I don't have any orders Captain." Obi Wan assured him. "I just wanted to ask you what it was like serving with Anakin Skywalker on Praesitlyn."

Slayke grumbled for a moment. "I should have busted his jaw when I had the chance, he was a great soldier and a smart kid, but after what he's done to my Republic I owe him a good beating. I'll bet underneath that calm Jedi facade you have going on you'd like to give him a good pounding too eh?"

Obi Wan sighed, but his respirator didn't catch the sound. "More than you could possibly know."

Both men headed back to the bridge, where Obi Wan would begin the official mission countdown and finalize his battle plans with the captains of his task force.



The Crimson Guardsmen along with Anakin took their prisoner along the prescribed route through 500 Imperial. To the discreet elevator that led down below the works, and into the lair of the Sith were Darth Sidious awaited.

"Master Yoda, we meet again." Sidious cackled, but Yoda did not even bother to reply, or meet his gaze. "Did you think you could hide forever? Until that excruciatingly long lifespan of yours ended?" Sidious drew closer to Yoda, and motioned to his guards to take him into the next room. The stench of death flooded Yoda's nostrils and even Anakin was taken aback.

"This room has seen the death of many a Jedi Master Yoda. Taken right off the streets of Coruscant itself, but never a Master of your own stature. Lord Vader, bind him to the chair."

Anakin looked over at his Master and nodded his head, Yoda shut his eyes as Anakin picked him up from the ground and slammed him onto the durasteel table, which still had the dried blood of Sifo Dyas on it. Yoda was then shackled to the chair, and he resisted against his bindings to test their strength. Nothing he couldn't break out of with the Force at his side.

"Don't let the shackles fool you Master Yoda, I have a far more permanent way of ensuring your subjugation. Guards, leave us."

The Crimsons guards left the room, now it was only the two Sith and their prisoner. Yoda was beside himself with shock, Palpatine trusted Skywalker with absolute certainty now. Sidious raised his hands and the familiar sound of his Force lightning scorched the air a split second before connecting with Yoda, Yoda bit into his lip and resisted

"You see my apprentice, the manifest rage of the Dark Side is more than just an instrument of murder. Can you feel it now? Train your thoughts on Yoda."

Sidious attacked Yoda again and Anakin could sense Yoda's presence slipping away. But despite the enormous pain that was obviously being inflicted. Yoda was not dead, or even unconscious. The Dark Side called out to Palpatine as he intensified his attack, craving the suffering and pain and imposing those cravings onto the Dark Master. For years Palpatine had enacted the Revenge of the Sith through quiet manipulations and strategic maneuvering. When the time had finally come to destroy the Jedi the bulk of the work had been quick, efficient, thorough, and undeniably effective. But that effectiveness had done little to satisfy the craving for vengeance that ached in Palpatine's black heart. In order to satisfy the hunger for pain within him, he was willing to keep Yoda alive as his prisoner, so that he would never again know another day without suffering.

"You are keeping him alive somehow. You're doing more than just attacking him." Anakin interjected

"Good, Good Lord Vader, you are realizing to nature of the power that I promised. Only with the strength of the Dark Side is one able to influence the life force of a being. To prevent them from dying."

Sidious blasted Yoda again, as he used his lightning Anakin could sense the different powers at work. The incarnate anger was focused into lightning, and brutally attack Yoda's body. The other power, which Anakin could tell was taking up much more of his concentration, was in forcing Yoda's cells to resist the attack. Leaving no damage to the body but causing an immeasurable amount of pain. Sidious continued this in various bursts for nearly a half an hour. With each second that passed Yoda screamed, his resolve wavered and he nearly screamed out to beg for mercy. Before he could, Palpatine stopped.

Sidious walked over to the table where Yoda desperately inhaled air into his lungs, the taste of each breath was noxious and foul but nevertheless it fueled him. Sidious stood next to Yoda and placed his hands over his body.

"Now Lord Vader, watch as I show you the only way to break a Jedi. By taking from him the very thing that justifies his existence!"

Yoda was in too much pain to fight back but if he knew what Palpatine was about to do he would have tried, and if he had known what kind of unspeakable tortures the Emperor had in mind for him he may not have gone along with Qui Gon's plan after all.

Palpatine stood over Yoda, and slowly but surely began severing his connection to the force.

"The ability to cut off the Force to another was a Jedi technique from long ago." Palpatine explained to Anakin with a strained voice. "It was abandoned because the effects were not entirely permanent, if the subject is powerful enough they may be able to once again feel the Force with retraining."

Palpatine was visibly taxing himself as the glowing essence of Yoda rose from his body and dissipated slowly into the air. Inside his body, the midichlorians, the small organisms that were an indicator of a being's force potential, died as their conduit to the Force was cut off. The pain of the Sith Lightning had been sharp and brutal; this was a much different ache, a solemn dull pain that was robbing Yoda's powers. Palpatine didn't seem to be faring much better, but he knew that in order to safely imprison Yoda, it must be done. Yoda opened his eyes and watched, as Anakin stood there, unmoving and silent. Learning from his new Master's teachings. After another few moments, Sidious stopped his attack. Yoda could feel that a part of his strength had been taken away from him, but not completely. Yoda mustered what part of the Force he could and placed himself into a healing trance as Darth Sidious turned to his apprentice, weary but unharmed.

"The process is incomplete for now Lord Vader," Sidious said to his apprentice. But it is of no concern, I will continue again tomorrow. I do hope you have learned something from this."

"I have my master, I will contemplate this further tonight."

"Remember though Lord Vader, pain is not the only weapon of the Sith. The dark side is fed by anger, passion, suffering, and fear. Of those three things perhaps the most important one to cultivate is fear."

"But Master, A true Sith has no fear."

"It is the fear of others, your opponents, your enemies, those that are weaker than you. That is the fear you must take control of. It is where many apprentices have failed, but where you will succeed Lord Vader. The Sith are the masters of the Dark Side, no matter who you face always remember that their fear is your weapon. Once you have mastered that then no one will ever defeat you."

Sidious and Vader walked out of the chamber, leaving the unconscious Yoda alone temporarily. "He will be a tough one to break," remarked Sidious "but in time I will take the Force from him, and then Yoda will be little more than an amusement. In the mean time I have another task for you."

Anakin felt as if he had taken a blaster bolt to his chest. "Master, I had promised Padme that I would..."

"Yes yes I know, you haven't spent much time with your wife and children since thier birth. However this assignment is directly related to their well being." Sidious stopped as Anakin stopped with him. "I take it you remember a Dark Jedi by the name of Asajj Ventress?"

Anakin crushed his mechanical fist and the Dark Side enveloped over him. Sidious smiled at the display of anger. "It has been reported that she was the mastermind behind Aurra Sing's escape from the Oov IV military prison. Intelligence indicates that she used a solar sailer not unlike the one Count Dooku used to escape from Geonosis." Another unimportant line but one that Sidious knew would get a rise out of Vader, and it did. When it came to his apprentice there were two things that he knew would immediately draw an angry response, his wife and the battle that took his hand.

Shortly after returning from the Battle of Rendili, Anakin had encountered Asajj Ventress on Coruscant. Ventress had been there to assassinate the rogue Jedi Quinlan Vos but instead discovered Anakin's secret marriage. She threatened Padme's life and the two dueled, with Anakin sending her into the abyss of Coruscant. She had survived somehow and was being cybernetically restored by Count Dooku when Anakin had fought her and nearly killed her again. It was the threat against Padme however, that ignited Anakin's fury against her.

"I will hunt her down and kill her master." Anakin said in a grim voice. His utter seriousness was met though with deflecting laughter from Palpatine.

"I have no doubt in my mind Lord Vader, but I have already saved you the trouble. Ventress and Sing are in the Alderaan system. General Skywalker is due to attend their demilitarization ceremony as the official Imperial Representative. They are there for the express purpose of killing you."

Anakin began to ask a question, and then stopped. He had wanted to ask how it was that Ventress knew where Anakin was to be in advance, but there was only one possible solution. His master had orchestrated the entire Clone Wars, he had manipulated countless soldiers and planets including powerful men such as Count Dooku and even the Jedi Council. He had also proven with Dooku that he wasn't above using his apprentices as bait either. It didn't matter, Obi Wan had used Anakin in the same manner on at least several occaisions and Anakin far preferred a combat situation far more than the ivory tower behind the scenes dueling that was Lord Sidious' specialty. Sidious examined his apprentice for any sort of objection but found none.

"I will destroy them both master, it would be my pleasure." Darth Vader said as he finally relaxed his fist.

"Then there is no need for further discussion. A shuttle will be waiting to take you to Alderaan in about twelve hours. See to it that you arrive promptly."

Vader bowed to Sidious and then immediately made his way towards the lift that would take him back up to the city, and to his family. The Emperor summoned his guards once again to his side.

"See to it that the Jedi is sedated," Palpatine handed the guardsmen a small datapad. "These are my private physicians, have them set up an intravenous flow triggered to his neural responses. Then while he's unconscious fit him with a slave chip." That was an order he couldn't give in front of Anakin, who was vehemently against the same devices that had enslaved him as a child.

Sidious laughed again. It had taken many years, and for the first time he felt completely and utterly victorious. But there was still work to be done in prserving that victory. He made his way back to his office flanked by a pair of his guards. He had to make one last transmission before resuming his official duties...
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Clones had nothing to do with Neeja death. He was killed in a battle with some proto-sith in I, Jedi flashback scenes. At the time we were told this was after the clone wars ended but that seems less likely.

EDIT: Reading further I see you've tried incorperate this but the sources in I, Jedi were a Force Visison and Telepathically transfered camaasi memories, neither ar subject to imperial disinformation. :P
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Nice chapter as the other ones. It seems that there are big things to come soon.
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Crazedwraith wrote:Clones had nothing to do with Neeja death. He was killed in a battle with some proto-sith in I, Jedi flashback scenes. At the time we were told this was after the clone wars ended but that seems less likely.

EDIT: Reading further I see you've tried incorperate this but the sources in I, Jedi were a Force Visison and Telepathically transfered camaasi memories, neither ar subject to imperial disinformation. :P
But they are susceptible to the Caamasi Jedi in question hitting the wacky 'baccy a little too hard one night, creating that false memory, which- Wait, this isn't UPF, never mind. :D

I'd like to come up with a serious argument, but all I can come up with is a cheap shot: Stackpole's the kind of hack who couldn't write a decent novel if it was being dictated to him.
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"I Jedi" was the shittiest EU novel of all time. I'd disregard it blatantly if I wasn't trying to include continuity with the EU. As far as I'm concerned though Stackpole's Nejaa death is contradicted by the Clone Wars themselves thus throwing that entire wretched novel out of the window.

As for the "Force Vision", this vision was influened by the Imperial disinformation. It was never actually witnessed, the truth is based on a lie so to speak.

Later on in the story I may have the Halcyon/Horn family eliminated out of spite.
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Darth Fanboy wrote: Later on in the story I may have the Halcyon/Horn family eliminated out of spite.
For ultimate irony, give them the same treatment that every KIA in Rogue Squadron after Lujayne got, and devote maybe a sentence to them before the events of their death. :twisted:
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If I can find a way for the Purge to track down 'Valin Horn' as a Jedi offspring then there will never be a Corran Horn and the improvements made to the SW Galaxy will be great!
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Sorry if this seems like nitpicking, but are you going to edit your earlier chapters? I detected an apparent plot hole in this:
Of course Yoda had not died during their battle, but there was no way he would ever live openly again either. Sidious had been content to let Yoda die a lonesome miserable death in exile on some uncharted world, but when the passenger roster for a transport heading to Tatooine listed a diminutive passenger who gave no name, paid for fare in hard currency, and carried no posessions with him, Sidious had sought his answer in the Force and recieved it.
Which contradicts this:
"Master, my success was far greater than we could have hoped for. After destroying Jabba the Hutt I managed to take a prisoner of great value, you will be most pleased."

A prisoner from Tatooine? There wasn't anyone on Tatooine that would have been worth anything, Sidious was about to reprimand his apprentice when the image shifted towards a shackled Yoda, who was currently facing the ground as a trio of clone troopers trained their blasters on him.
Maybe rewrite it to be like this?
A prisoner from Tatooine? Anyone on Tatooine who would have been worth anything should've been killed, their deaths a lesson in the futility of resisting the Sith.
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Those gun nuts do not understand the meaning of "overkill," and will simply use weapon after weapon of mass destruction (WMD) until the monster is dead, or until they run out of weapons.

They have more WMD than there are monsters for us to fight. (More insanity here.)
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Never liked that line anyway, contradiction removed with minimal effort. Thanks for the catch, although next time I would appreciate a courtesy PM instead.
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Darth Fanboy wrote:Thanks for the catch, although next time I would appreciate a courtesy PM instead.
Sorry. I'm still not very skilled with BBS posting techniques-- you can tell by the fact that I list the entire www address of websites instead of having words like the "this link" be links to the websites.
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Those gun nuts do not understand the meaning of "overkill," and will simply use weapon after weapon of mass destruction (WMD) until the monster is dead, or until they run out of weapons.

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A short rewrite to the second chapter, located on the first page. Not enough though to warrant calling it an 'update.'

bascially I brought the Sifo Dyas stuff into line with Dark Empire. Thanks to Pubilus' posting for bringing it to my attention. As much as I hated Dark Empire i'm trying not to dismiss any of the EU completely, except for a few minor parts of "I, Jedi" of course.
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