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I'll try to get a few more pages of story up this weekend
But I did want to clarify something quickly before people get too confused:
Shader as he is in the story NOW:
Shader as I often draw him/as the doll shows (I'll color this... in time!)
Edge having fun:
The blood on his hand isn't his . Oh, Edge is fun. This is actually a backstory image, so his horns are smaller.
But I did want to clarify something quickly before people get too confused:
Shader as he is in the story NOW:
Shader as I often draw him/as the doll shows (I'll color this... in time!)
Edge having fun:
The blood on his hand isn't his . Oh, Edge is fun. This is actually a backstory image, so his horns are smaller.
"The rest of the poem plays upon that pun. On the contrary, says Catullus, although my verses are soft (molliculi ac parum pudici in line 8, reversing the play on words), they can arouse even limp old men. Should Furius and Aurelius have any remaining doubts about Catullus' virility, he offers to fuck them anally and orally to prove otherwise." - Catullus 16, Wikipedia
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So I'm guessing Edge has two sides.
Ouch.
Ouch.
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Well, I'm sick out of my mind at the moment (probably flu) but decided to update my story anyway with what I got finished this weekend. It's only the first drafts of this part of this chapter, but ah well.
Same link, it' still chapter one! Whee!
I'll try to update with a fixed version once I am no longer distracted by my ceaseless coughing and hacking
Same link, it' still chapter one! Whee!
I'll try to update with a fixed version once I am no longer distracted by my ceaseless coughing and hacking
"The rest of the poem plays upon that pun. On the contrary, says Catullus, although my verses are soft (molliculi ac parum pudici in line 8, reversing the play on words), they can arouse even limp old men. Should Furius and Aurelius have any remaining doubts about Catullus' virility, he offers to fuck them anally and orally to prove otherwise." - Catullus 16, Wikipedia
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Thanks, Spanky
... Random pondering: that's about long enough to divide into a chapter 2 by now
... Random pondering: that's about long enough to divide into a chapter 2 by now
"The rest of the poem plays upon that pun. On the contrary, says Catullus, although my verses are soft (molliculi ac parum pudici in line 8, reversing the play on words), they can arouse even limp old men. Should Furius and Aurelius have any remaining doubts about Catullus' virility, he offers to fuck them anally and orally to prove otherwise." - Catullus 16, Wikipedia
And done.
Very good, very good indeed.
I think I'm beginning to see where this is going, but nevertheless, it is a very enjoyable read (with a few exceptions, your prose are very good, better than some professional authors I've read, and mine for that matter.)
Oh, and I hope you recover promptly.
Very good, very good indeed.
I think I'm beginning to see where this is going, but nevertheless, it is a very enjoyable read (with a few exceptions, your prose are very good, better than some professional authors I've read, and mine for that matter.)
Oh, and I hope you recover promptly.
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"In the unlikely story that is America, there has never been anything false about hope." - President Barack Obama
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Hugh Thompson Jr.- A True American Hero
"In the unlikely story that is America, there has never been anything false about hope." - President Barack Obama
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Yes, it is long enough for two chapters--more comments tomorrow--and yes, do get well soon.Pick wrote:Well, I'm sick out of my mind at the moment (probably flu) but decided to update my story anyway with what I got finished this weekend. It's only the first drafts of this part of this chapter, but ah well.
Same link, it' still chapter one! Whee! :mrgreen:
I'll try to update with a fixed version once I am no longer distracted by my ceaseless coughing and hacking :)
*grins*
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Ford Prefect wrote:Eeeee! Edge is icky! I think that those chillun are going to get a shock and a surprise. Very cool.
For the record, Edge isn't an antagonist though.
Thanks much to everyone who's been keeping up with it; I'll keep writing it
"The rest of the poem plays upon that pun. On the contrary, says Catullus, although my verses are soft (molliculi ac parum pudici in line 8, reversing the play on words), they can arouse even limp old men. Should Furius and Aurelius have any remaining doubts about Catullus' virility, he offers to fuck them anally and orally to prove otherwise." - Catullus 16, Wikipedia
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That was incredibly fast and disturbingly cute.
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No Duchess, that wasn't incredibly fast - that was so freaking fast that it set the atmosphere on fire. Though I do suppose that technically, that is incredibly fast . . . err.
Anyway, I'd like to come up with a nice pointy epithetet to describe how monumentally cool your artwork is Pick, but I'm having trouble working neutron star into it, so I'll just say that you just rock harder than Ayers.
Anyway, I'd like to come up with a nice pointy epithetet to describe how monumentally cool your artwork is Pick, but I'm having trouble working neutron star into it, so I'll just say that you just rock harder than Ayers.
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Awwwwwwwww! Poor guy.Pick wrote:http://www.darkcouncilors.com/Artwork/s ... biicky.jpgFord Prefect wrote:Eeeee! Edge is icky! I think that those chillun are going to get a shock and a surprise. Very cool.
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I take it from Umber's Library that you've already planned the story out into chapters, and it will have 27? Or are you planning on adding another pile of books later?
An Erisian Hymn:
Onward Christian Soldiers, / Onward Buddhist Priests.
Onward, Fruits of Islam, / Fight 'till you're deceased.
Fight your little battles, / Join in thickest fray;
For the Greater Glory / of Dis-cord-i-a!
Yah, yah, yah, / Yah-yah-yah-yah plfffffffft!
Onward Christian Soldiers, / Onward Buddhist Priests.
Onward, Fruits of Islam, / Fight 'till you're deceased.
Fight your little battles, / Join in thickest fray;
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The intent is for it to take place in three parts; the current Umber's Library image is for the first part of the story. I don't plan for all of the chapters to be nearly as long as the first one, naturally. Even so, I may end up limiting the total chapters of the entire story to 27 anyway. I'm really not sure; it depends on how much material I get out of it once it starts really getting going, and that's what I won't be sure of until I get there. I still haven't introduced even a third of the important cast.Psycho Smiley wrote:I take it from Umber's Library that you've already planned the story out into chapters, and it will have 27? Or are you planning on adding another pile of books later?
Also, randomly, because it seemed wise to have a reference, here's a very fast inking of the Good adolescents as they CURRENTLY appear. Very fast inking/drawing. So don't get on my case
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Splendid additional work, Pick, and I think the picture matches up with the characterizations superbly--though I am a bit curious about their physiology, to be sure.
The latest part is certainly much more firm than what came before it in terms of structure and progression of the plot and so on, so you're going in the right direction.
The latest part is certainly much more firm than what came before it in terms of structure and progression of the plot and so on, so you're going in the right direction.
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Well, DIG also had 27 chapters (and all of them were as long as your first one, heh)--that was rather intentional, though. It was intended to have 30 (3x10) parts, with 27 of them (3x3x3) being chapters and three (3) being special sections. Trilogies in trilogies in trilogies added to a trilogy and yielding a trilogy multipled by an order of magnitude.Pick wrote:The intent is for it to take place in three parts; the current Umber's Library image is for the first part of the story. I don't plan for all of the chapters to be nearly as long as the first one, naturally. Even so, I may end up limiting the total chapters of the entire story to 27 anyway. I'm really not sure; it depends on how much material I get out of it once it starts really getting going, and that's what I won't be sure of until I get there. I still haven't introduced even a third of the important cast.Psycho Smiley wrote:I take it from Umber's Library that you've already planned the story out into chapters, and it will have 27? Or are you planning on adding another pile of books later?
It's really not uncommon for people to have an internal motivation in the length and composition of their stories, and can even end up an important part of the story, which is after all more than just the words but also how it's laid out.
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In 1966 the Soviets find something on the dark side of the Moon. In 2104 they come back. -- Red Banner / White Star, a nBSG continuation story. Updated to Chapter 4.0 -- 14 January 2013.