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IG-88E wrote:
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Just read the latest chapter

:D :twisted: :D :twisted: :D :twisted: :D :twisted: :D :twisted:

Oddly enough, my interrogation method in the fanfic seems completely in character for me :)
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The randomness of Wong's question was hilarious. Keep up the great work, you guys!
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When do I get to seduce/fuck the brains out of/ someone?
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NecronLord wrote:When do I get to seduce/fuck the brains out of/ someone?
You'll get your turn....

As far as the latest chapter, good work Kelly!
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Darth Yoshi wrote:The randomness of Wong's question was hilarious. Keep up the great work, you guys!
That should technically good work girl! as Kelly wrote that chapter.
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Ted wrote:That should technically good work girl! as Kelly wrote that chapter.
Ted, I know you mean well, but sometime you go too far. Like now. While it's true that I contributed little/nothing to this chapter, do not presume to speak for Kelly or myself and jump in to correct someone.
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Ted wrote:That should technically good work girl! as Kelly wrote that chapter.
Ted, I know you mean well, but sometime you go too far. Like now. While it's true that I contributed little/nothing to this chapter, do not presume to speak for Kelly or myself and jump in to correct someone.
You know people, recently, seem to have been getting very touchy about who is geting credit for what. I think everyone needs to take a chill pill, both sides. Ted guys can be non-gender specific and besides we still know Iggy is in on this to some degree so don't cut him out...Iggy he's not speaking for you or her he's speaking his opinion of who should be credited an intelligent reader will understand that and if they don't then screw 'em but don't waste your hostility on such things.
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CmdrWilkens wrote:
IG-88E wrote:
Ted wrote:That should technically good work girl! as Kelly wrote that chapter.
Ted, I know you mean well, but sometime you go too far. Like now. While it's true that I contributed little/nothing to this chapter, do not presume to speak for Kelly or myself and jump in to correct someone.
You know people, recently, seem to have been getting very touchy about who is geting credit for what. I think everyone needs to take a chill pill, both sides. Ted guys can be non-gender specific and besides we still know Iggy is in on this to some degree so don't cut him out...Iggy he's not speaking for you or her he's speaking his opinion of who should be credited an intelligent reader will understand that and if they don't then screw 'em but don't waste your hostility on such things.
Ok, sorry Iggy, everyone, I'll just shut up for awhile, maybe that'll help me.
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Kelly looked around her as she pulled on the clothes she had been given. Mya and the other females were here, yet she was the only one dressing in fighting apparel. Her Master's love approached her. "Kelly, you are going to fight one of the male apprentices."

She looked up as she pulled a boot on. "Well, that explains a few things. Why me, though?"

Her green eyes darted from side to side as she made sure no one was listening. "Lady Sylvar says it is because you and he are the strongest. It is a test to see who has the strongest apprentice."

Kelly sighed. She still was having flashbacks of Lord Wong entering her mind. "Strongest apprentice, eh? Sounds like a battle of egos to me." She finished lacing up her boot and stood before Mya. "Perhaps I can get this apprentice to help me."

The younger woman looked at her, tears in her eyes. She saw so much of Aulduin's influence in Kelly. Wrapping her arms around her, she let the tears come.

"Oh Mya, please don't cry." Kelly held her close. The last time she'd done this, they'd ended up in bed together. Would this be a repeat performance?

"I'm afraid for you, Kelly," she confessed as she buried her head in the other woman's chest. "You're all I have left now."

She lifted her head and kissed the tears away. "He's fine, Mya. Aulduin is looking for us. I just know it." She leaned down and kissed her lips softly.

Mya returned the kiss hungrily. She reached for the zipper in front of the skin-tight jumpsuit Kelly was wearing. Pulling it down to her mid tummy, she pushed it aside, letting the other woman's breasts free. She cupped them with her hands and squeezed.

Kelly was shocked at first, but quickly recovered. She had no idea what Mya had in mind, but she wasn't about to stop her. A moan escaped her lips as Mya's fingers gently caressed her nipples. She held the younger woman close to her as they kissed.

Mya broke the kiss and trailed down to Kelly's breasts. She took one in her mouth and began to suckle it. The other, she twisted the nipple between her fingers, making it hard. She heard Kelly moan and that encouraged her even more. Her tongue flicked over the nipple in her mouth as she tweaked and pulled on the other.

Kelly entangled her hands in Mya's hair and moaned. She pulled her close, wanting to feel everything. They had gained an audience. Zaia slowly approached and moved Mya's hand as she took over, sucking the other nipple. Sylvar and Ewo, not wanting to be left out, dropped to their knees and pulled Kelly's suit down to her ankles. Their tongues touched as they licked her from either side.

Kelly's knees were weak as she felt the four mouths devouring her. She pulled Mya and Zaia's heads closer to her and closed her legs over the tongues assaulting her. Her moans grew louder the more turned on she became.

"Tsk, tsk. Do you ladies want your warrior worn out before her battle?"

Everyone scrambled and looked up to see Lady Shinova. "We're sorry, Mistress," Mya stammered in apology.

Shinova looked approvingly over Kelly's body. "It's quite alright. Get her dressed and ready. The others are waiting."




Kelly walked out to the fighting mat. She looked across the mat at her opponent. There was something familiar about him. Shrugging it off, she ignited her purple lightsaber and stepped forward. "May I know your name before I defeat you?" she asked in a smug tone.

"Ignatius Thorne," he replied coldly as he ignited his own blade. The deep, blood red cast an eerie glow about them. "Shall we begin?"

She nodded and saluted him with her blade. He nodded and moved quickly towards her. Their blades clashed as she blocked his blow to her shoulder. Pushing his blade away, she made several quick swipes at him. He easily blocked them all.

He again took the offensive, his blade arcing in at her midsection. She moved to block, but he suddenly halted, leapt back then drove forward again, aiming for her heart. She barely managed to twist aside in time, and he landed on one knee. "What are you trying to do, kill me?" she hissed.

"If that is what it takes," he replied, his cold eyes boring into hers. Suddenly, they hardened, and a wave of Force energy flew out. She easily dissipated it with a wave. He wasn't as experienced as she was. Good. His lightsaber moved to sweep her legs out from under her. She jumped backwards, but another push hit her in mid air. She landed overbalanced and fell. They both scrambled to their feet, and the two sabers clashed again. Kelly came at him with a two-handed cut, but he parried it and tried a riposte to her stomach. Once again, she barely dodged. *There's no point holding back* she realized. *This guy's playing for keeps.*

She took a step back and held her blade up before her. Her eyes closed as she concentrated on the Force. She used the battle techniques Aulduin had taught her. Too bad she didn't have a second blade. That would surely ensure her victory.

Iggy watched her closely. *Foolish woman,* he thought as she closed her eyes. He casually approached her and swung his blade at her mid-section.

Her blade flashed and came down to block. She opened her eyes, a hardened look on her face. "Do not underestimate me." The purple blade began to move quickly, stabbing and slashing at her opponent.

His red blade countered, sparking off hers as they briefly touched. "I'll demand the same from you," he growled. His eyes tightened in concentration for a moment, then he launched himself into a backwards flip that was higher than any normal human could jump. As he landed, he suddenly launched his saber like a spear, using the force to guide it right towards her. She grinned. He'd made a big mistake. As the saber flew towards her, she reached to the side and brought her own saber around, knocking it away.

Then, his shoulder slammed into her midsection. *He followed it!* she realized. *He followed the saber!* She fell backwards, but managed to turn it into an awkward backspring, landing on one knee, out of breath. He called the saber back to his hand. "Nice move," she coughed as she tried to stand.

He nodded as he lit his blade again and charged while she was still coming up. She knew he wanted to take her while she was weakened. She let him come to her. He lowered his shoulder and she raised a hand.

Ignatius suddenly found himself flying backwards. The Force push had surprised him. Not again. He kept his feet when he landed. Suddenly, he seemed to tense every muscle in his body. He growled. An rush of air seemed to emanate from his body. *Pumping himself up for something,* Kelly thought. *Just bring it.*

The tension in Iggy's muscles activated a series of commands running to the layers of organic material he'd built into his body. The material, not organs in any proper sense, was what provided him with his connection to the Force, a connection he'd lusted after ever since he'd first tasted battle with a Jedi. The droid had cheated, bastardized the Force for his own gain. He was, by simply existing, a perversion of the force.

Now, the material received a series of electronic and chemical stimulants, coaxing out the power the droid needed.

Kelly sensed a wave of darkness from her opponent. "What the hell?" she said aloud. Suddenly Ignatius rushed her, moving twice as fast as before. She is finding it hard to block every shot. The others bounce off her Force shield as she keeps backing up.

Soon, she finds herself against the wall. Iggy slams his blade against hers over and over. He pushes her to the floor until her blade flies away. She held up her hands to block the next blow, but he stopped.

Ignatius extended a hand to the fallen Kelly, extinguishing his lightsaber. "You're pretty good," he said with a smile.

"Not as good as you, apparently," she said as he pulled her up.

"Don't sell yourself short. You just need to learn better hand-to-hand. Then you'll be unstoppable." The words struck a familiar chord in Kelly's memory. She frowned and looked at Ignatius strangely. "What?" he asked.

"Have we ever met? You seem so familiar."

"Doubt it. I think I'd remember you," he said with a smirk.

She shrugged. "Whatever." *I'm keeping my eye on you, Iggy*

They heard clapping coming from a balcony above them. A light comes on and shows all of the Dark Lords and Ladies applauding their efforts. "Bravo," Lord Wong says. "I am very impressed by both of your abilities. You two will soon be a grand addition to our council."

Kelly looked up and frowned. There was no way she would ever join them. She would rather die first.

Iggy, however, was quite pleased, both with his own performance and the reaction of the Sith Council. If they approved of his fighting, it meant he was very close to finally getting what he'd wanted for so long. A nod and small smile of approval from Lady Tann sent a thrill running through him. He stepped forward, catching Kelly's attention. In full view of her and the Sith, he bowed deeply, one hand over his heart. As he returned to a full stand, he caught her eye. The corner of his mouth twitched in a smirk. Both knew who the Sith respected now.



Kelly threw her lightsaber against the wall as she walked into the dressing room. "How could I have fucking lost!" She was angry, very angry. She reached out and crushed a chair to pieces using the Force.

"Kelly?" Mya appeared from around a corner. She'd felt the dark flow from her friend and was instantly worried. "Be careful," she whispered.

She came to her senses and saw the chair. "What am I doing." She collapsed to her knees. "I don't want to fall." The tears came easily as she cried out her frustrations. "I WILL NEVER FALL!"
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And the pull of the Dark Side increases.........
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Do you know how utterly pissed off I am right now after writing that? I hate when I get so involved in my characters.
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The first half, up to where Iggy warps the force, but then the writing seems to get worse. The writing goes from past tense, then suddenly goes into present tense, then at the end of the fight, returns to past tense. It got me a bit whacked reading that part, suddenly changing around and all.
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Yeah... sorry about that. I was getting tired and not really paying attention too much to tenses.
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Wow, that's really excellent. I think part of the reason this story is so compelling is because you are so personally involved in what's going on with the characters, Kelly. It's really extrodinary.
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Zaia wrote:Wow, that's really excellent. I think part of the reason this story is so compelling is because you are so personally involved in what's going on with the characters, Kelly. It's really extrodinary.
Thanks Zaia... that really means a lot to me.
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Kelly Antilles wrote:Do you know how utterly pissed off I am right now after writing that? I hate when I get so involved in my characters.
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Kelly, one of the marks of a true writer is one can well and truly feel what the character feels; a writer cold and distant from his/her creations writes a cold and distant story. You are who you write to an extent, it is that emotionalism that comes through. This is a good thing. It is sometimes called "Passion in one's Art". A compliment.

I enjoy this story. And among the howling chorus of voices clamoring for a part, I'm wondering if a bounty hunter who goes by the handle of "Coyote" might not appear to slap around a certain overly-curious Trek landing party; maybe taking one of their weak and silly women while selling out their location to other interested parties... :twisted:

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I get to kill Darkstar! Yay!

*does happy dance*
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Beowulf wrote:I get to kill Darkstar! Yay!

*does happy dance*
I never said that. :twisted:
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Kelly Antilles wrote:The tension in Iggy's muscles activated a series of commands running to the layers of organic material he'd built into his body. The material, not organs in any proper sense, was what provided him with his connection to the Force, a connection he'd lusted after ever since he'd first tasted battle with a Jedi. The droid had cheated, bastardized the Force for his own gain. He was, by simply existing, a perversion of the force.
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IG-88E wrote:
Beowulf wrote:I get to kill Darkstar! Yay!

*does happy dance*
I never said that. :twisted:
It's implied... You see... I'm one of the only named stardestroyers. And the one where all the *ahem* action is taking place. Therefore it's logical that they will be meeting up w/ the ISD Beowulf eventually, and thence meet their demise.
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Of course it's implied. I can imply anything I want. Doesn't mean it'll come true...necessarily. :twisted:
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The Trekkies Win!
OH MY GOD!

Iggy's a TREKKIE :evil:

KILL HIM!!!!!!
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And someone insert the HTD into a situation where he can insert something into something bipedal and female...

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