[fan-fic] Nameless fan fic part 2 *****Warning nasty fic****

[LT.Hit-Man]

Well here's the next part of my fic enjoy, not to nasty but it's going to get there.
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Still here well then looks like you got the guts then

As agents Rodgers and Steiner drove into South Park Colorado the rain had stopped but the dark storm clouds still remained in the chilly air casting a dark and slightly depressing feeling around the town.

Agent Steiner stopped the car in front of the local police station and looked over at Nathan who was taking a quick nap in the passenger's seat, after about three hours of driving they had switched drivers and continued on there way at that time Nathan though it would be a good idea to get some rest and told her to wake him when they had reached town.

As Kalei was reaching over to wake her partner she saw him squirm around in the seat and was muttering something that she could not make out as if in the grips of a nightmare.
" Hey Nathan we're here, are you ok? " she asked her partner as she gently shook him on the shoulder watching as his eye's snapped open and for a split second she could see a look of deep sorrow with a hint of horror as he took a second to get his bearings.

" Yes I'm ok just having a really screwy dream ." Nathan said as he put his fedora on his head and then flipped a set of black shades over his eyes to hide the darkness within his half sleepy eyes.

Kalei watched as her partner open the glove box of the car and pulled out what looked to be an oversized .44 desert eagle auto pistol, " What the hell is that? " she asked Nathan as he slapped a long clip into the pistol and jacked around into it.
" One thing your going to learn about this job is that you can never have enough firepower rookie."

Kalei was more then a bit miffed at that, sure this was her second case in the PID but that did not mean she was a complete ditz about things as she checked her own side arm, a Glock 98 that had a full auto fire mode an under the barrel laser sight and was chamber for a 10mm round.

" Look this may only be my second case but that does not mean you have to use the kid gloves with me
ok? " she told her partner as she tucked the glock back into the holster under her left arm.

Nathan looked over at his partner for a moment, he could see that she had a clam look on her lovely face and a dammed and determined look in her eyes.

" I hope your right on that because if you hump the bunk on one of these missions you are not going to live to regret screwing up if your lucky and one last thing to keep in mind it's not just your ass on the line by mine and quite possibly a whole lot of other people's asses as well so no fucking around we do this by the book understand? " he said to her.

" What a fucking prick! " Kalei thought to herself as they got out of the car and began to walk towards the police station and that's when she knew that this was going to be a bad mission as a chill raced up her spine.

Fifteen minutes after they had checked in with the S.P.P. Nathan and Kalei where taken to the crime scene by a very reluctant police sargent who was none to happy about having the FBI shitting in his back yard and said as much.

" Look I don't why the chief called you F.B.I. agents in on this after all the dumb son of bitch burnt up while he was smoking in bed. " the police sargent said in such a dreadful back water hick voice that it made the skin of the of the F.B.I. agents crawl like a swarm of army ants.
" However since your here why don't I show you around town after your done here? " the police sargent said to Kalei as he flashed her a smile that made his snaggled toothed buck teeth stand out all the more as he gave her the once over.

" I don't think so now let's just get to the matter at hand. " Kalei told the police sargent in an exasperated voice not only have the verbal chewing out that her partner had given her but her in a back mood but she was still feeling the lingering after pangs from the outburst of lust she had experienced in the shower room and the cold damp air certainly did nothing to improve her disposition.

When the three of them walked into the cordoned off room of the sleazy hotel and saw the victim in the bed both Nathan and Kalei's faith in the South Park police department sunk to a new all time low, because it was clear to both the FBI agents that from unburnt clothes on the victim that who ever he was he had not died from smoking in bed, they where able to determine the gender of the victim from the brunt cock that was standing straight up like the stump of a fallen tree after a forest fire from with in his dirty paints.

" Wait outside." Nathan told the police sargent who was leering as his partner's ass as she was walking towards the dead man as she fought down the urge to puke from the smell of burnt flesh, sweat and stale sex that hung in the air of the scum pit of a hotel room like a deadly chemical weapon.

Kalei shuddered slightly as she watched the fleas bedbugs and other assorted vermin scuttle away from the burnt body that they had been feasting upon, " I hate bugs! " Kalei thought to herself as she took a closer look at the body, noting the small pool of congealed blood that stained the ratty and unburnt pillow.

Nathan had been scanning the body with his tricked out shades to see if he could find anything out of the ordinary when there was a small commotion outside of the room.
" Who are and what is your business here? " the dismissed police sargent said

" We're with the CCPI and we are here on official business now stand aside and let us though." an all to familiar voice said that caused Nathan's blood to slowly boil with an intense hatred as he removed the shades from his eyes not noticing that his partner was watching him with a slightly alarmed look as she saw the low burning flames ignite in his eyes.

" Hey you can't go in there! " the police sargent said a split second before the door to the room opened to reveal a very tall man that stood at lest six foot nine inches to seven foot, four inches tall.

Nathan and took a quick look at the man and off the top of his head he estimated that he weight about
120 lbs to 210 tops but the long black trench coat that seemed to merge with the thin looking black turtle neck sweater and black combat paints making it kind of difficult to make an accurate assessment of the man's weight.

Kalei felt her eyes just about pop out of her skull as she took a good look at the man who had walked into the crime scene, she saw that the man had long stark white hair that was tied off at the base of his skull with a simple leather strip that reached down the middle of his back as the sound of his heavy black combat boots echoed in the silent air of the room as he walked past her.

But what had really unnerved the two FBI agents was the man's light smokey gray eyes, the blank look told them that this guy was not out to lunch but in an entirely different galaxy.

Anders Russell was in a very rotten mood, he had been taking a refreshing dip in his pool at his luxuriant home in Sydney Australia when he got a call from the CCPI telling him that they needed him for a job he just about turned it down but ever since he lost his wife and son and there unborn daughter in a fiery car crash a few years ago he had been laying low and jacking the stock market at his leisure to try and forget his loss but he had been getting restless and said why the hell not and took the job with the CCPI it was not the first time had taken jobs for the various world governments after he had quit his job as a government diplomatic analyst/consultant.

But after he had met Lisa he had decided to quit his job with the government and go into semi retirement only taking a job when he was most absolutely needed and in order to see to his new family needs he had been playing dirty pool in the stock market.

Then the case came that had caused the death of his wife and children after that mess was dealt with he told all his contacts that he was retired from the wet works and dirty tricks game.

Once he got to the CCPI's main head quarters he looked over the details of case and was none to happy to find that he would be working with a partner but took the case anyways as he fought off the major jet lag that was giving him no end of grief.

Anders had never feared another human being in his life but all that changed when he met his partner after talking with his new partner he thought two things, namely where the hell had the CCPI dug up this freak show and how the hell could he get off of this case but for reasons he could not explain to himself he decided to tough it out and get this case dealt with.


" What the fuck are you doing here? " Nathan snarled as he fought down the urge to pull out his side arm and blast Anders into ground round, at the sound of his voice Kalei looked away from the strange man who had entered the crime scene and looked over to the new man that had entered the room with the police sargent in tow noticing the sudden tension in the air as her partner and this new guy where staring at each other and wishing nothing more then to kill the other man before them.

" It's been a long time Nathan, not long enough though had I known that you would be on this case I would not have taken it. " Anders said to one of his most hated enemies in a voice so cold that it made liquid nitrogen look like boiling lava as he to fought the urge to kill Nathan.

For a frozen moment in time no one moved of said a word each of the lost in there own dark thoughts.

" Will some one kindly tell me what the hell is going on around? " the police sargent said braking near lethal silence in the room, and gulped nervously as three sets of eyes turn there gaze towards him.
" I thought I told you to leave this crime scene! " Nathan snarled at the police sargent.

The police sargent was at his wits end with being pushed around by these FBI agents and what not but the moment he started to open his mouth to rase a fuss about the matter they all heard a soft wispiering voice and yet commanding voice that went right to the core of there beings, " Lever this place and do not return until you are told to, now GO! "
The two FBI agents and the second CCPI agent turned to see the tall man with the trippy eyes looking at the police sargent but seemingly looking past the police sargent as he pointed a finger towards the police sargent that was covered by a full length black leather glove and for a moment the police sargent stood there slack jawed as thin thread of spittle before turning jerkily and walking out of the room.

" Don't forget to close the door on the way out. " the strange man said but barely moving his near bloodless lips, Anders, Kalei and Nathan watched as the police sargent's nose began to bleed a bit as he pulled the door shut as he walked out of the room.

" What the fuck was that shit? " the three of thoughts as they watched the strange man starting to reach under his trench coat to reveal what looked to be a Mac-10 uzi hanging by a black leather strap over his left shoulder as he pulled out a short hafted double bladed battle axe who's blades where a dead jet black and there where strange looking rune like glyphs that looked to done in deep purple amethyst that bisected a human skull that had a large multifaceted black diamonds in it eye sockets on ether side of the black blades, the wooden haft was of a dark wood that was bound in leather straps and on the end of the wooden shaft was a foot long curving spike that looked to be made out of thick copper.

" Who the hell are you two? " Kalei said to the strange man who was slowly lifting the battle axe to his face while muttering something under his breath, seeing that she was not going to get an answer from the strange man she looked at the man who had came in after the strange man and asked the same thing.

Anders tore his gaze away from his freaky partner and looked at the young woman whom he assumed was Nathan's partner " I'm Anders Russell, special field agent for the CCPI and that is my partner Agent Dreadwood of the CCPI and you are? "
" I'm FBI/PID agent Steiner and I take it you already know my partner Agent Rodgers." Kalei said to the CCPI agent as she was trying to figure just what they hell was her partner's problem with agent Russell

" We've met! " Nathan said as his burning hatred for Anders began to creep back up on him.

" I must have silence! " the wispiery, iron hard voice of agent Dreadwood echoed though out the crime scene before Anders could say a word in retaliation to Nathan's attitude when the three of the looked over to agent Dreadwood, any words that they had to say died as there eyes grew wide with shock as they saw what looked to be thick bolt of black lighting shooting out from agent Dreadwood's eyes and into the back of the human skull on the battle axe, from the black diamonds in the eye sockets of the human skull a pale black light was playing over the body in the bed and for a split second they could see the pale green out line of something over the dead body much like they way the invisible monster from the movie Forbidden Planet had been done when it was made visible then it was gone and agent Dreadwood slowly knelt to the floor on one knee, his breath was labored as a thin sheen of sweat dripped from his deeply troubled brow.

The three of them stood rooted to the spot where they where standing, watching as agent Dreadwood slowly got to his feet, there minds unable or unwilling to accept what they had just seen as agent Dreadwood turned to face them.

" We must hurry time is running out for us all. " agent Dreadwood said to his partners on this case as he wiped away the trickling sweat from his forehead as he took a few deep breaths, held them and let them go.

" Who or what are you? and what the fuck was that shit! " Kalei said to agent Dreadwood who no longer had the out to lunch look in his light smokey gray eyes was gone, replaced with a piercing stare that seemed like it could bore though fifty metric tons of solid steel that caused agent Steiner to shiver momentarily.

Agent Dreadwood looked at the three of his partners for a moment and asked if any of them where a pathologist and when the young lady who called herself agent Steiner told him that she was he had a look of what might be considered amusement as he spoke to her in a voice that was no longer an iron hard wispier but a deep rich and commandingly resonant tone of voice.

" When you examine the body look for signs of other physical trauma beside thermalidic trauma on and around the desecssed's penis as well as any kind of other trauma on or around the head and for your sake do NOT touch the body with your bare flesh if you value your life. "

" You're saying that the body is a biohazard? " Nathan said as the three of them took a few steps away from the burnt body as a wave of fear ached up there spines as visions of they bodies being turned into a pile of steaming goo raced though there minds.

" It could very well be if I'm right on what had killed this man. " agent Dreadwood told them as he clipped the strange battle axe back on to a loop on his black belt that held a few small fabric bags and other odds and ends.

" Oh shit you do- " Anders was about to ask his partner if he though that any of the local police may have come into contact with the body but agent Dreadwood beat him to the punch, " If any of the locals had touched the body I would have known about before we got to the crime scene."

Anders was at his wit's end with his partner ever since he had met agent Dreadwood he had been getting the silent treatment for him and he was no longer going to stand for it.
" Look fancy paints just who the hell are you and how the fuck do you know what we're dealing with! "

But before agent Dreadwood could answer his partner's question he was cut off by Nathan who looked over at Anders and began to read him the riot act.
" Man you are really slipping up, your working with a guy and you know nothing about him what joke! "

Anders blew a gasket and really began to lay into Nathan " Eat it! shit head I just met this guy yesterday when I took this case so fuck off! "

Kalei watched at the two men balled there hands into fists that looked like they where ready to fly, she saw that agent Russell was a fit looking man however she was not sure but it seemed like he had a slight limp in his left leg as she watched as the two men got ready to hammer on one another.

" ENOUGH OF THIS TOMFOOLERY! " Agent Deadwood's slightly raised voice called out demanding to be obeyed, slowly the three of them turned to face Dreadwood who was standing there with his arms crossed over his chest and the three of them a slight trace of annoyance in his piercing eyes.
" You want to know what we are facing? so be it but you will not like what you are going to find out."

" OH SHIT! " the three of them thought as they waited for agent Dreadwood to drop the hammer on them.

" We are more then likely dealing with a Succubus or one of the subspecies of Sccubi." Agent Dreadwood told his partners and added " As to how I know about what we are dealing with I am the last of my kind." watching as they exchanged glances of confusion and fear.


" For I am the last of the Necromancers! "


Agent Dreadwood told his partners in his most menacingly commanding voice and watched as the hair on his partners head's literally stood on end.
And so the die of fate where cast.


Alexandra Wyrsch brushed a long stroke of forest green pain of the canvas before her as the haunting strains of Bach, Toccata and Fugue in D minor echoed though out her studio apartment as she set about her latest masterpiece, pausing for a moment to brush aside lock of her strawberry blonde hair that fell in front of her bright green eyes despite the paint stained head band on her head, once the hair had been brushed aside she put her paint brush to her latest painting knowing full well that in a few minutes the errant lock would fall once more but kept working as she lost herself in her latest burst of creative energy that had taken her by surprise.

So enthralled in her work that she did not hear the doorbell ring as she kept adding more and more brush strokes to the canvas, each one of them more frenetic and intense then the last.

The doorbell rung a second, third time unheeded but on the fourth ring Alexandra threw down the brush in frustrated annoyance.
" Ok hold on I'm coming damm it! " she shouted as she marched towards the door, brushing the errant lock of hair out of the way, muttering under breath that who ever was at the door had better have a damm good reason for disturbing her.

She opened the door to see a young woman in a UPS outfit holding a large box and a clipboard under her left arm.
" Are you Ms.Wyrsch?" the UPS girl asked and when Alexandra said yes the girl told her that she had a package for her and handed her the box.

" Sign here." the tried looking UPS girl said and handed the clipboard to Alexandra who signed it and then walked into her apartment shutting the door behind her.

Alexandra put the box on her dinning room table and opened it, after clearing away the packing foam she reach in the box and pulled out a mask



That she had found in an back alley curio shop that she had come a cross after taking a wrong turn from her first art show.

When she first saw the mask she had been repulsed by it but yet she was unable to tear her eyes away from it and without really realizing what she was doing she reached out and picked it up it felt smooth and cool to her touch although she was not sure it felt like the mask was made out of bone but yet it felt heaver then bone much like a piece of well carved fine marble would weigh.

After talking to the small stooped over old man who ran the curio shop she paid for the mask and had it ship to her home before she took the next flight home, when she got home there was a message on her answering machine that her package had been misplaced she told them that if they did not find her package head would roll after a few hours she got another call from UPS telling her that they had found her package and to make up for any inconvenience they where refunding her shipping fee.

" Lucky for them that they did not brake you. " Alexandra said to the mask with a wistful smile before setting the mask on her mantle before she returned to her painting.


The End

[Sea Skimmer]

Nice work, but "Mac-10 uzi"? Those are two very different guns.

[LT.Hit-Man]

[quote="Sea Skimmer"]Nice work, but "Mac-10 uzi"? Those are two very different guns.

As far as I know the Mac-10 is a veration on the standered 9mm uzi that made to fire 9mm's or .45's by John Ingrim

[Sea Skimmer]

Nice work, but "Mac-10 uzi"? Those are two very different guns.

As far as I know the Mac-10 is a veration on the standered 9mm uzi that made to fire 9mm's or .45's by John Ingrim

I've heard the MAC-10 drew on the Mini Uzi design, but I think it was more original the a simple caliber alteration. I could be wrong though.

[God Emperor]

Nice work, can't wait for more.

[Cpt_Frank]

I've heard the MAC-10 drew on the Mini Uzi design, but I think it was more original the a simple caliber alteration. I could be wrong though.

MAC-10


Mini-Uzi

Obviously they're different designs, though they belong to the same category of weapon (heavy machine pistol / light submachine gun).
Now since the Uzi was the first of this genre of guns it's tempting to call all weapons that belong to this category Uzis. But it's not correct.

Note, the Mini Uzi came out in the mid-eighties while the MAC-10 was invented in the early seventies. So the MAC-10 was inspired not by the Mini Uzi but by the original Uzi.

[Keevan_Colton]

Only on Sd.net

Critique of a fan fic turns into a debate on the exact technical details of the weapons involved.

Good work Lt.

[weemadando]

No, not only on SDnet, but here we can bring in the pictures...

And cool! I have what may appear to be a major character!

[HemlockGrey]

Eh...it didn't seem to flow very well. Might have been me, but there seemed to have been a lot of run-ons.

[weemadando]

Eh...it didn't seem to flow very well. Might have been me, but there seemed to have been a lot of run-ons.

The Ell-Tee has a - errr - a unique grasp of English. Its better if you don't mention it.

[HemlockGrey]

The Ell-Tee has a - errr - a unique grasp of English. Its better if you don't mention it.

Why? If it makes the fic less enjoyable, which it does, I'm going to mention it. I'm not trying to be mean.

[Kelly Antilles]

Hemlock, just read it and go on.


LT, it's beautiful as always. You already know what it made me dream.

[HemlockGrey]

Hemlock, just read it and go on.

Why? What is so damned wrong about criticism here?

[Kuja]

Hemlock, just read it and go on.

Why? What is so damned wrong about criticism here?

I'm with Hemlock on this one. Some of the editing is not very well done.

The story itself, however, is good.

[Kelly Antilles]

I don't think he does edit...

Hey, LT, I'm offering to edit for you before you post if you wish.

[LT.Hit-Man]

Yo Iggy/Hemlock I thank you for your input and the two of you are right on the matter, however the reasons why my writing is bad is because I have been realy busy where I'm living, been staying up way to late and I did say that I would have this part of the fic out in due time so I kind of rushed it a bit, sorry about.

Kelly I know what it made you dream and trust me that's going into the fic
If you want to edit this that's cool but as long as it will not screw up your input for Pervertion of the force and thanks.

To all who have comented on this fic I am glad that you have enjoyed it I'll keep trying to do that best I can to keep my readers happy.