Request for Review
Moderator: LadyTevar
Request for Review
As my story isn't sci-fi related, I won't post it, but click this link to see it on Writing.com. I value the input of my fellow authors, so tell me what you think.
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The Duchess of Zeon
- Gözde
- Posts: 14566
- Joined: 2002-09-18 01:06am
- Location: Exiled in the Pale of Settlement.
I'll try to provide one this weekend.
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In 1966 the Soviets find something on the dark side of the Moon. In 2104 they come back. -- Red Banner / White Star, a nBSG continuation story. Updated to Chapter 4.0 -- 14 January 2013.
In 1966 the Soviets find something on the dark side of the Moon. In 2104 they come back. -- Red Banner / White Star, a nBSG continuation story. Updated to Chapter 4.0 -- 14 January 2013.
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Singular Quartet
- Sith Marauder
- Posts: 3896
- Joined: 2002-07-04 05:33pm
- Location: This is sky. It is made of FUCKING and LIMIT.
Hmm... not bad, I'd have to say. Can't really compare it to my chidlhood, as we never really had any pranksters in our calls, and the obly bullies I ever had were not a pair of idividuals, but most of my entire 3rd grade class instead...
As to the actual writing... hrmm... I'd ahve to say you encompassed the natural rambling of small children very well, along with their worries and games, too. Semantically, it's very good. Synatxtically... it looks fine. Didn't see anything obvious, and nothing that didn't mesh. Looks fine, to me.
As to the actual writing... hrmm... I'd ahve to say you encompassed the natural rambling of small children very well, along with their worries and games, too. Semantically, it's very good. Synatxtically... it looks fine. Didn't see anything obvious, and nothing that didn't mesh. Looks fine, to me.